You tore out my soul and let it bleed,
Into a thousand pieces to me you feed,
A million lies of consultation,
Of absolution and humiliation.
I feel so numb,
For all my insides,
You rip out with your thumb,
I can not hide.
Will I find peace in these baron lands?
Or will you haunt me in these desolate sands?
Running for my life I can never escape,
This injustice for my soul you take,
I'm left on the ground,
Bruised and waiting to be found,
For you took my life,
Leaving behind marks with your scythe.
I am now left broken,
Broken in two.
Will I ever find heaven?
Will this torment ever be through?
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Amazing.
I can totally connect with this, because I have gone through this.
But the way you wrote this, even if the reader hasnt gone through this, they could still connect and feel the pain because of how well written the poem is!
Very nice language, and the form is very effective.
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Amazing. love it.
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i really love this one!ahhhh the word i was looking for all day about your poems,i remember now!your poems are really sopisticated.i think it was that word.anyway this is really good.
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Beautiful, I've been in both shoes and sad to say you'll never lose that pain...
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wow.........
For you took my life,
Leaving behind marks with your scythe.
the imagry portrayed is amazing
the depth and the emotions....wow
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i love it love poems that reveal strong emotions and it is well written!
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Another wonderful write
As sad and depressing as it is, I like it. I write things like this myself, and its actually an enjoyable experience to read related things from other people. I find this to be a little more ... I dont know how to explain it really, but I loved it.
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I've written a poem like this before. I know what it feels like and sometimes life sucks. Actually it always sucks it just depends if you're in an optimistic mood or not at the time. haha. ok but anyways good poem.
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I love this poem. It was great.
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greeeeeeeeeeeeeeat loved it
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Excellent writing!!
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Great!
This was a great write! I can relate to it in so many ways! You did a great job expressing your feelings here. Bravo to you!
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ty for your comment
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"you tore out my soul and let it bleed"
WOW! u talented poet, you! lol very nice write. flows quite nicely... a haunting poem.. with just a hint of evil (hahahah.. that was kinda lame, huh? )
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lol thxs for your comment
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np np!
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I dont really have a favorite part Its all really good, you write with pure emotion great job.
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i love i problely wont stop thinking about it god ur a good poet
i want u jk
so meaning full
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lol thxs for the comment
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I love this I love all of em you write your such a great artist
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wow i no just how u feel unfortunatly im sorry that we have to live with this pain of wut ur poem describes but i wish u well.... cause i would never treat u like that u deserve better but u loved her and that is all that matter
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very good
i really like this poem because it flowed and your poem is amazing.i loved it alot.
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Wow! this is amazing!I love this poem. ^_^
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I love this poem! Ur an amazing writer!
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Amazing!
This poem is amazing. I love you're writing. You show such great emotion. And rhyme so well. Keep up the beautiful work. -
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Gr8 poem, i luv it
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i love it
this is great. i love the whole rhyming scheme. i also like the emotion coming from this poem.
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Dave, another great poem! I LOVE IT!!
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thxs ali
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I like this a whole bunch. It's wonderful and i like the rhyming. Thanks for sharing.
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yw thxs for reading
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hey i really like this poem. i think it's like my fav out of all the ones i've read. i like the rhyming
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ty for your comment
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Wow this poem like a bullet
This is an electrifying, beautiful and gorgeous poem..keep writing..this poem very strong..quite depressing i hope you'll be okay...and i also hope you win something for this contest because U deserve it!
A million lies of consultation,
Of absolution and humiliation.
this part here is absolutely STRIKING!
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