Mirror Mask (Cinquain) by The Madman at All poetry

Mirrors,
present to me
masked mirages they see,
but mirror not what lies behind
the masks.

Carryall,
my companion,
a multitude of masks
adorned to meet situations
I face,

to hide
the pain inside
the hurt that I've been through,
different places, disparate faces...

mirage.

Author notes

My first attempt at this form...Cinquain: syllable count of 2, 4, 6, 8, 2

Artwork: as the world falls down .. by ~metaledz
http://metaledz.deviantart.com/art/as-the-world-falls-down-61434479

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48 hour Cinquain Contest by azure85. 600 points, ended December 19, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments

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SpydurPoet
September 28, 2008
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Absolutely fantastic. You did a great job on this.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
leander
January 15, 2008

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I'm not really a form poet, but if I have to point out my favourite form, then yes, it would be the cinquain

you did very well with this one, although the syllable count - as I counted it - is wrong in your last cinquain, in line 4

But it can also be a matter of pronunciation (and since english isn't my maternal)... Maybe you can check that line?

Thanks for entering this lovely string of cinquain as well!
Leander
- The Madman
  January 15, 2008
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  Mirage as in what you might see in the desert, something that isnt there, is 2 syllables. Thank you for the nice comment on this work,
  
  Evan
Florida Sunshine
January 11, 2008

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aaaaaaaaah, your cinquinn ~ is elegant ~ and yet so true~ ~ some of the stuff you write ~ i feel like your looking straight into my heart and soul ~ you truly are an amazing poet ~ Beautifully done~

Thanks for sharing this with me~ I appreciate reading your work ~ good luck to you
- The Madman
  January 11, 2008
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  Hi..sorry about the wrong reply box...lol. And I think we all have certain masks we don now and then to face certain situations..especially those of us who have been hurt badly in ways in our pasts and carry those with us. Thanks once again for the nice comments,
  
  Evan
amaranthine lover
January 10, 2008

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I have actually seen the MirrorMask movie, but I don't think that this has any relation at all to it, lol, but I did rather enjoy reading the piece and am happy to comment on it, you did very well and thanks for entering
- The Madman
  January 11, 2008
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  Well thanks for the visit and for the nice comments left on this work and no it has nothing to do with the movie although i always loved the title of teh movie..and when i ran across the artwork it was art that oerfectly matched teh title and thus became this write....sort of my own picture prompt..lol. Thanks once again,
  
  Evan
islekine
January 3, 2008

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I really like this write...
I am not an expert by any means on form poetry...
I still don't recognize a lot of the forms...
I think this is very well done!
Write on!
*PEACE*
- The Madman
  January 3, 2008
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  Thanks so much for the nice comment and glad that you liked this pen. The Cinquain is much like teh Haiku and tanka and other such forms where each line has a specific syllable count that you must use. The Cinquain count goes like this: 2, 4, 6, 8, and 2 again, and thats the number of syllables per line. Thanks again,
  
  Evan
Lavender Butterfly
December 30, 2007
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Although this is fabulous you have exceeded the 30 word prewritten limit... x
januaryrain
December 22, 2007
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Excellent, congrats on the silver
- The Madman
  December 22, 2007
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  Thanks for the visit and the congrats,
  
  Evan
Hetha
December 20, 2007

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Wow! Excellent Cinquain! Very meaningful subject, you explore it with depth and brevity, that I very much enjoyed.
- The Madman
  December 21, 2007
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  Thanks again, Hetha, for yet another visit to one of my pens and for the wonderful comments left once again for it,
  
  Evan
ears2hearyou
December 20, 2007

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Just a excellently written poem
written so we could enjoy the flow and imagery, very
well done dear poet, VERY WELL DONE!
absolute treasure of a poem, and so inspiring the
imagery...
good job!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
- The Madman
  December 21, 2007
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  Thanks for stopping in and blessing this page and work with your visit and wonderful comments left on it. Both are truly appreciated as always,
  
  Evan
songstress80
December 20, 2007

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beautiful!
beautiful work as always. Bravo! you definately deserved your silver. i love the flow and the words are precious. also i thank you for your kind words and thoughts on my poems. i enjoy reading your poems & i'm glad you like mine too. please continue the marvelous work! :0)
- The Madman
  December 21, 2007
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  thanks so much for the lovely comments left with this work on this visit and am looking forward to reading more of yours also,
  
  Evan
Poetic Tasha
December 20, 2007

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ooh lovely and nice worl with the form
well done!

Tasha
- The Madman
  December 20, 2007
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  Thanks so much for the visit and for the wonderful comments you have graced this work and this page with..always appreciated,
  
  Evan
piccola
December 20, 2007

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I thought I had read and commented on this before...maybe not. I always enjoy writes about disguises and masks. Good work.
- The Madman
  December 20, 2007
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  LOl..well atually you had but twice is nice...lol, adds to my comment count, comeback as often as you want,
  
  Evan
FallenEngel
December 20, 2007
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awesome
this is brilliant definatly worth the silver i love it
- The Madman
  December 20, 2007
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  Thanks so much Katy for visiting this work and for the wonderful comment you have left on this page with it. Both always appreciated,
  
  Evan
Marshall013004
December 20, 2007

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I enjoyed this poem , very nice job on your first try! Thanks for sharing!!
- The Madman
  December 20, 2007
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  Thanks so much for visiting this work and am pleased that you found it to your liking,
  
  Evan
Keyser Soze
December 19, 2007

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Very clever poet, I very much liked it. I also liked that somehow the image in the mirror reminded me of the cheshire cat from Alice in Wonderland, putting a whole extra spin on it.
Well played
- The Madman
  December 19, 2007
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  Thank you for visiting this work and for the nice comment left upon this page with it,
  
  Evan
parntsoftwins
December 18, 2007

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I really like this poem. Such a great job for your first try. I love the message of how we all have masks for certain times and feelings of our life. Lovely work.
- The Madman
  December 19, 2007
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  Thank you for your nice comments on this work and for visiting my pages,
  
  Evan
Myjoy
December 18, 2007

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Woooooooo I like this one, I am so happy I stopped to read tonight. Well done. The reflection of ones self is the hardest thing to face.
- The Madman
  December 19, 2007
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  Thanks once again for this visit to one of my works and for the nice comment you have left here with it,
  
  Evan
azure85
December 18, 2007

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Very well done for your first try, it is a lovely set of cinquains. The message is good, with the masks that we wear for certain times, that hide the true self. Thank you so much for your cinquains.
- The Madman
  December 19, 2007
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  thank you for the visit and for the nice comment left on this work. It's nice that people run form contests so one can brach out a bit and try something new, this was fun,
  
  Evan
piccola
December 18, 2007
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nice write. This is a really great form to play with. I like the presentation as well.
- The Madman
  December 19, 2007
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  Thank you for visiting this work and for the lovely comments left with it,
  
  Evan
Sue Cardwell
December 18, 2007

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I love both the form and the content of your poem and the sentiment I can also comprehend. I agree, we all have masks that we choose to hide behind and I don't believe we ever see our true selves in our reflection.

All the best to you in this contest...Sue
- The Madman
  December 18, 2007
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  Thanks so much Sue for visiting this work and for the nice comments you have left on it for this work. Both truly appreciated as always,
  
  Evan
Re-invention
December 18, 2007

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so true... love how you made the end, powerful. mirrors are such a mystery to me, they seem to be a reflection but somehow they just dont feel like that. good luck in the contest!
- The Madman
  December 18, 2007
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  Thank you so much for your visit and for the nice comment you have graced this work with,
  
  Evan
RedwingSpirit
December 18, 2007
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great ciquain good luck
- The Madman
  December 18, 2007
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  Thanks so much for visiting this page and this work and for the nice comment left here with it,
  
  Evan