I saw you for the first time today, it really
touched me in a special way. I wanted to tell
you but what could I say? That somehow just seeing you brightned my day.
I,ve never believed in love at first sight,never thought
it could be right, but that was before I noticed you
staring at me, from that moment on I believed in destiny
You walked over to where i stood, just like I
was hoping you would, took my hand and put it
in your own, I knew then I would never again be
all alone.
A contest entry
- Love is more than a four letter word! by Unstoppable.
600 points, ended December 27, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
do you believe in destiny?
Comments
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Great right!!! The form and rhyme was excellent. Thank you for taking the time to enter this great piece in my contest. I enjoyed reading it and best of luck in the contest.
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Awww. That's sweet. I think the title is a great and subtle way to break way into what the poem is about. The only thing I thought could be different was that I thought there should be more! I can understand the element of leaving the reader with wanting more, but I want to know what happened later . . .even in a faint way you could incorporate that, elaborate on what the last line says. That's just how I see it. Good job!
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