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Bloodshot Eyes

Looking deep into your eyes
I see the same pain,
Loneliness, heartless look

Fake smiles, small laughs
Happiness has it's price
How much?

I have to help you
What else can I do?
The small scars on your arm
Tell me what've you've done

Please tell me what you think

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  • brittany.geeze
    December 18, 2007
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    I see you're still writing sad depressing poems?
    Come on, Laura- you can write happy stuff can't you?!

    But to 'critique' the poem.
    It flows well, except this line "Loneliness, heartless look" i dont know... but other than that it's a nice [sad] poem.

    Love,
    Brittany!