a flash of checkers towel
in time lapse twisting
and you catch the red of the room
like dominant colors of art,
slow down from obvious excitement
and grey filing cabinet it's hung over
is more than underneath yet nothing
without some stimulation, a child can point out
and so brown cordoruy by it
is my readiness for leaves of jump path
not just serenely as business
with green schedule
or just seeing tree that can't be climbed
but no half cushion of transference to note clouds above
and yellow collage of calm on grass to yo-yo
on gaze to trail of graze
coincidentally by crunchy outdoor foliage lesson
there's a supplement in such simple dandelion
getting upon blanket closing up season
or souvenir extends it
not just hung as wallpaper
but fingered displacing plate in indoor picnic
how to preserve in winter vibrantly;
neither placebo, this air dehydrated snack is impressive
twirling stems
youngster can watch as support of change too
Author notes
I may edit more or less
good luck can literally be a waste of breath
please don't use emoticons or the applause, but visit with your speech
A contest entry
- QUICKIE TIME by doyouloveit.
475 points, ended December 31, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
exclamation mark my daughter could put a nail on, would you?
Comments
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i don't know what to say right now but this is brilliant strong full of depth and feelings thoughts that i believe are intense enough for everyone to get the point you have made here in this wonderful writing
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blood pressure read
doyouloveit thanks for reciprocating concerns...
I'm grateful for the gotta go but got it predilection to my diligence to stay with this for you until that seemed natural lol.
I really do appreciate the bronze and your summary of how I stretched my entry to maybe more than just sweat.
I didn't feel dispassionate about it either,
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This was a tasty word salad that made me smack my lips!
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spotting your expression was fun vrsus stamped applause symbol
MJ Donnely abbreviation can bring a rhythm too wanting undersatanding
thanks for thinking my indulging in language still gave ingredients per se. Enthusiasm for an author as chef is chief in the tongue's gradient range to grade!
with ear the bowl not handed for a spill but delightful echo on floor of mouth catching it even. and then may it not be stale for all but at right stages.
appreciating your manner with it,
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