He holds the power to break her heart,
She thinks he doesn’t know this.
Oh but it’s so obvious that he does,
The things he whispers in the dark,
Cut deep but she tries not to let it show,
His hatred for her grows everyday,
He tries to hide it from her searching eyes,
The careless whispers in the dark,
Promises he won’t be able to keep,
She can’t change just because he says he cares,
(The careless whispers)
Have started again he’s telling lies to keep her,
She cries at night when he’s not there,
Because now she knows the truth,
He holds the power to break her completely,
Everything she wanted has changed,
She doesn’t want a happy ending,
At least not with him, she just wants a way out,
Her friends don’t recognise her now,
She has no one else to turn to, there’s only him,
She’s given in and admitted defeat,
She doesn’t think she’s strong enough,
To stand on her own two feet,
(The careless whispers)
He knows she running away,
And he’s like the eagle,
He’s slowly stalking his prey,
His not going to let her get away.
Author notes
PoisonDaggers
I'm using the title "Careless Whispers"
oh... i want to be a best friend
A contest entry
- AP FAMILY NEEDED by Temptation..
525 points, ended January 2, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful
So I loved this with all my heart!
Seriously. It was such a beautiful and intensely written piece!
I can totally relate to this because after breaking up with my first boyfriend (who I thought I was in live with...although I'm questioning myself about that now) I felt this way every.single.day. I also pushed all of my friends away and then when he was gone, I had nothing.
If this is from a personal point of view -- keep your head up and don't ever stop writing!
Great job! Congrats on bronze in the contest!
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fear holds woman to there men also another failure all eyes on you to fail some woman stay in a relationship so not to be judged by families or friends
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Quite effective
Feels so familiar to me, something I don't care to relive (physically anyway).
It is true that these types "seem" to know how to keep a woman in fear and from running.
They just choose the ones they think won't run.
But actually there is always a way out.
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good poem." Hes never going to let go so here I go. Running away as far as I can but yet hes there with me and with his hatred for me." Great write I loved it.
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Thanks for the comment on my poem!
Nice poem...they're good lyrics too!
"He holds the power to break her completely,
Everything she wanted has changed,
She doesn’t want a happy ending,
At least not with him, she just wants a way out,
Her friends don’t recognise her now,
She has no one else to turn to, there’s only him,
She’s given in and admitted defeat,
She doesn’t think she’s strong enough,
To stand on her own two feet,"
I love these parts
Great write I can relate to this one!
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OMG!!! Geepers... this gave me goosebumps because I have been in a relationship just like this!! This part really got to me:
Her friends don’t recognise her now,
She has no one else to turn to, there’s only him,
Why do we do that as woman! Change ourselves for a man, and abandon our friends (whether emotionally or physically) because of allowing someone to become all consuming! I'm determined never to do that again.
Amazing write!!!
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this is amazing
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Vivid
This spoke to me - I can feel the emotions and share some of them. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
wolfie
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OMG, this is an amazing poem. I absolutely love it. it is so dark and it kept me interested with each and every line. I especially liked the last 4 lines. great job on this poem.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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omg. perfect. i love it. not just a single part of it... but the entire thing. you did an excellent job with the prompt!! thank you so much for entering this!!!
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lol
Title: Careless Whispers
Pic: http://i208.photobucket.com/albums/bb123/Demon_Lace/the_kiss_of_dawn_by_Princess_of_Sha.jpg
Quote: "it crawls in the dark
hides in the shadow
it flees from happiness
and despises laughter"
the quote is part of one of my poems. if you use it please use it in quotations and credit me in your notes.
but good luck and make sure you put everything in your authors notes!!
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