Smiling,
Like an orange peeled in the sun,
juices dripping on autumn leaves
Music,
Saxophone vibrations spilling notes,
bottled in crystal, cast out to sea
Anticipation,
Dizzy spells from peeping above clouds,
while the body sweats in insatiable storms
Heartbeats,
Golden memories easing the pain
Smiling in anticipation
while hearts beat to the music
In the rain
Author notes
Prompt: Picture inspired
http://www.jmaylone.com/gallery/2007/frenzy3
A contest entry
- QUICKIE TIME by doyouloveit.
475 points, ended December 31, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very very nice
A most thoughtful and loving piece of poetry!
Wishing you the very best in this contest! -
Ahhh the frenzy of love when it hits the senses. Well done to the prompt. Beautiful words that simply sing. Well done. ~Pamela
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an outing and everything
ah the writer had ardor today
wow, I must have been feeling disorganized when I saw this picture spur; and my entry's avidity came by what fixes it could have me restate, but you saw a sheerness to celebration... even by butterfly wings and associations. stupendous pin pointing emotions.
as the scaling of color can be paired with that paragon and painting as well as layers of relating -- the verve of the hues prevails
you chisel it out with closure as well as flap so to speak from "Heartbeats" to "while hearts beat to the music" which is sectioned off to different muscle of meaning. One obstacle to this collection might be found in exact reference of "music" twice. but the harmony with the title is showing what you're thinking.
comment isn't abrupt as for bonus points but found what to promote with them,
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this is very touching and a wonderful thought process on the picture i like what you have captured the feelings are some i can relate to when i think of past memories in my life thank you for writing for me
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