heaven
no more hatred
sorrows are passed away
death's but a distant memory
peaceful
peaceful
no more anger
hurtful words forgotten
from all this we shall be taken
away
away
soon I shall rise
lifted up in the clouds
to meet my Lord up in the air
risen
risen
to a new life
never to hurt again
the former things are passed away
reborn
reborn
God's grace given
a gift I did not earn
that He should give me a place in
heaven
Author notes
This is my own variation of cinquain where the last word of the cinquain is the starting word of the next. The whole chain ends with the same word it started with
In a list
A contest entry
- 48 hour Cinquain Contest by azure85.
600 points, ended December 19, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I like this very much, I have never saw this variation before. And I like where it leads the reader to, thoughts of what will one day be. Very well done, thank you for this cinquain loop of peace.
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this is a beutifully written peice with so much within it. it is truly amazing and i love it well done and best of luck
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This is an amazing poem, both in it's form and content. I found the whole experience of reading it to be peaceful and calming.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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Heaven is beautiful, and like your poem it is beautiful...who knows maybe I can see that place soon...
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I hope not to soon
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I love this daddy
This is a very touching poem, love the meaning behind this
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hey that looks fun daddy
teach me ??
i love you
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