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The Dock

Enveloped in the frigid air
a lone swan drifts by in the dark
and bobs its neck under the placid water.

A contest entry

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  • Naridill
    January 13, 2008

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    Last line is intriguing - very nicely said.
    Gripping as a whole and nicely penned.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Celticmoon
    January 12, 2008

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    Just three simple lines and yet I see myself in these words a s a teen years back. To feel like you are walking and living alone. Always left in the cold, not loved or least feeling like you aren't. Yes, very relatable for me. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!

    Blessings
    Bel


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    December 21, 2007

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    Nice Work

    your words flow beautifully and your poem is very interesting I like your imagery built through out this and the background you chose is of good choice. all round a masterful display of a very well rounded poetic genesis. keep up the good work Signed, SmokinHotWhiteTiger

  • A.o.r.
    December 18, 2007
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    Nice...

    Lovely penned. A picture in words.


  • Olivias Violin
    December 17, 2007
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    good image

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