do you remember me
the one you left behind
only to see in a memory
do you remember your little girl
who laughed and called you silly
do you know your little girl
or even think of her
do you ever want to go back
in time and stop the drugs
and see me
do you remember the girl
who fell down the stairs
and broke your door
as your memories fade
mine grow stronger
as you are weakened
i am alone
as you do drugs
you hurt your family
you hurt me but you
have also filled me with hope
hope of that one day
i can see you again
maybe even be that little girl
who runs to you yelling
daddy, daddy, daddy
and gives you a bear hug
maybe stop being hurt
and start being loved
do you remember
A contest entry
- Make Me Sad by hey charlie.
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Comments
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ooh this is so sad! and a really great piece, I can nearly touch the emotions.
great write!
THanks for your entry
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Wow, this poem really hits home with my family. I am the mother of a now teenage girl who's father is an alcoholic and drug addict. He abandoned her when she was 8 and was in and out of her life before that. I felt like I was reading a poem written by her. It tore at my heart. It is so sad what parents do to their children's lives with their addictions. It's so true that those left behind wonder if they are even remembered and are also the ones with all the memories. I am so sorry if you have been through this. I will tell you the same thing I tell my daughter, "It's not your fault and he's the one missing out on a wonderful daughter."
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Good job! Some parts seem a little forced but you more than made up for it with all the raw emotion you put in your poem. Thanks for entering.
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Oh wow....that is so heartbreaking! I'm so sorry you had to go through that...man I thought my dad had issues...I hope your dad gets thru his problem and the relationship between you two can mend. -Liz
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this is a powerful write buit i am sorry you had to go through this, no one deserves this. well done and beautifully written
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-hugs tight- I'm sorry you had to go through that...magnificiant poem. you are truly talented
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wow, this is powerful. I'm sorry you've had to go through this, but its good that u can write it down so beautifully
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This is a sad piece drugs and other issues of this society has destroyed many familys thank you for sharing this best wishes and much love
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