T-t-t-t-tell me was it worth it to you?
Yes, I'm shaking from it,
Yes, Yes,
In my hands I offer you pure happiness,
I promise it's not sugar,
You can taste the fucking sky!
Was it worth it to you?
Was it worth it to see him running in the winter night?
Did you skid on the ice, fall on your face?
Are you bleeding now?
I don't remember anything aside from my nose was dripping red onto the asphault,
And he took it all,
He took it all when he ran,
He took me too,
He took me too when he came,
COME TO ME
COME TO ME
Don't tell me where to go,
You feel like a rag doll,
You're shaking more than me and it's not even cold,
You spent the afternoon passed out in a lawnchair,
And the morning in the bathtub not eating or drinking,
Chewing on the cracks in your lip,
Sucking out the life,
Did you really think it would make it stop?
Tell me,
Tell me,
Was it worth it to you?
You're an addict now!
YOU'RE AN ADDICT NOW!
Throw on the handbrake,
Let's burn some rubber,
Goosebumps, clumps of clouds in the sky,
The sun will keep on burning,
The lines will keep on breaking,
Crush it up, lick the dollar,
I hope your lip is numb now,
Love love love love love,
Is this love?
A contest entry
- The Result Of Boredom: A "Whatever" Contest by Exodus.
525 points, ended January 25, 2008, 49 entries
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Comments
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Thank you. I agree with the ending, though I'd like a bit more of a wham ending. I'll work on it. As far as the flow, I meant for it to be that way. I kind of want it portray the feel of cocaine in the sense that it doesn't flow, it's ADD, the read is off, if that makes sense.
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Personally I think this would have ended better if you had left it at "is this love?". Other than that I think you have a great starting point here, there are some lines that don't read as well as others, but some of them really blew me away. Thank you
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