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Denial At It's Truest Form.

I sit in the bay window,
fireplace crackling
just to the left of me,
sun beams playing across my face,
on a rare, bright cloudless day.
Warming my pale flesh
on a  tropical beach towel,
in my bathing suit,
like some mannequin
advertising Speedos.
Outside the snow is piled high,
much like white sand,
it too refracts trillions
of diamond like specks.
But its cold is
innocuous to me,
in my cozy glass paned paradise,
I lather on some copper-tone,
and bask in the December sun,
What winter??

 

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  • Tam
    January 1, 2008

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    oh dear...

    love this write!
    very well done!
    I can hear the crackling of the fire...and feel the glow upon my cheeks...
    congrats on the HM! this is a delightful read!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • sheltered
    January 1, 2008
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    Perfect flow and awesome imagery.


  • micol
    December 30, 2007

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    Well done--I can see this happening, and chuckle. What a way to put the winter doldrums in their place. Good sense of description throughout...and humor.

    One suggestion: I think "its" is what line 16 needs--the possessive, rather than the "it is" contraction.

    Otherwise, delightful.


  • The FeliX
    December 20, 2007

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    this poem is wonderful, ironic and cynical it really wasn't what I was expecting from the tital.
    another great write =]