I'll be waiting 'neath the mistletoe
bedecked in red and green
Egg nog in one hand, my heart in the other
the most sincere gift you've ever seen
I'll be waiting by the fire
Casting cautious glances at you
Won't you come and warm your hands a while?
This fire's big enough for two
I'll be waiting by the tree
Pretending you're not there
But the heart can't ignore what it most desires
Can't help but match your stare
I'll be waiting on the pond
skating figure eights 'round your head
Walking hand in hand with you
Where I have never dared to tread
I'll be waiting here for you
So sure that this is right
Backdrop for a holiday spark
The perfect Christmas night
Author notes
I'm not very happy with this, but I'm just trying to get back into the swing of writing again. I'm a bit rusty :-)
A contest entry
- Allpoetry's Christmas 2007 Holiday Bash by Little Eagle.
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This was pretty good. It had a few rough patches the flow was a little halting in the third stanza line three may be if you shortened the line some what it would flow better. It just a lot of words to put to the established rhythm of the other stanzas. I like how you had the character waiting in different places every part of the christmas day this person is waiting for their love.
God Bless and Merry Christmas
Tammy
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Rusty?
My dear this is truly wonderful..
I love this write..:)
Beautiful holiday spirit!
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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