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Underneath Skin

Missing image

 

I’m trying to describe you

in rearranged words of rhythm

curious curves and creases curled

into comfort

 

painting you into my mind one

small brush stroke at a time

with visions fully alive in blues

and greens

 

I imagine Autumn leaves falling

in vivid hues of red-gold color

-a ritual dance of seasons in

painted pigments forever floating

with grace

 

in your birth

you were destined to be a King

rising from dormant heart beats

beneath cemetery trees

 

as the moon awakens-

messages are sent in the wind

emerging from grains of dust

a clear destinations journey

mapped from birth to throne

 

truth unveils itself as

skin is stretched over smooth bone

words flicker with color inside a

thousand dreams

making a connection to life

 

time stands perfectly still

skipping through echoes of souls

with bloodstained hands

crawling from shadows six foot down

as sleep curls softly          hemmed

 

                 into rearranged words of rhythm

                                             underneath skin

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Artists - Poets & Paint
Visionary Art - Poet & Painter The Art of ALEX GREY

Art work credited to Alex Grey

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  • Tetris
    January 29, 2008
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    Marry me

    I kid.

    But this poem is great.

    Solid and well put together.


  • poetryality silver member
    December 29, 2007

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    "curious curves and creases curled into comfort"

    Wonderful resonance, and alliteration written in the above lines poet.

    This free verse is exceptional and depicts the true nature of the artist, while sharing with the reader your ability to grasp rich tones and hues with your pen. Beautiful!

    Thank You for this entry and I wish you the very best in the comp.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee

  • piccola silver member
    December 24, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this. It was filled with images and used poetic devices without being forced. The graphic was very suitable too without drawing attention away from the write. Thank you for sharing with the group.


  • Hetha gold member
    December 24, 2007
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    sublime

  • vertigo beat
    December 21, 2007
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    beautiful.


  • tara wilson gold member
    December 18, 2007

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    I have been here to this one before....
    as you know..sometimes I like to think about a poem, form a comment and come back..so now this is not a mercy comment...lol

    I think each stanza of this poem is pretty amazing..
    your alliteration in it is really good..

    "truth unveils itself as

    skin is stretched over smooth bone

    words flicker with color inside a

    thousand dreams

    making a connection to life"

    this is some pretty deep and heavy stuff...and so perfect for the picture prompt...I feel that your poem embodies the mood of the picture very well..










  • Suzanne Dia
    December 18, 2007

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    Beautiful, really beautiful.
    There is a soft, gentle voice to this that I really enjoyed.

    You paint words wonderfully.




  • penman gold member
    December 17, 2007
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    Excellent

    such a well described poem. full of incredible images. Best of luck in the contest.


  • aliceramone
    December 17, 2007

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    the opening and last stanzas are perfect and the poem is excellent...a beautiful artist, you are
    "time stands perfectly still
    skipping through echoes of souls
    with bloodstained hands
    crawling from shadows six foot down
    as sleep curls softly"...that is perfection-bravo Becky!

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