O, magnificent spark
satellite to this heart
ember encircling
soft tissue once dark
Linger within orbit
Remaining as pure light
reflecting beauty's truth
deflecting sorrow's blight
Take notice of soft love
hidden unconvincingly
in tones borrowed from above
secrets for all to see
Look towards the rising sun
only thy beauty rivals
vibrancy not to be undone
except by thy true treasure
Breathtaking like crystal
unbroken perfections
running as drops of water
needing no dissection
serenely love explains
A contest entry
- Make me feel good by Whyitt U.
2200 points, ended December 19, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hood-Winked!
Yay! Congratulations on being ambushed by the Poetic Bandits!
I truly hope this mass visitation brings a smile to your face and a renewed confidence to your writing.
I enjoyed reading this piece; it has lovely poetic language throughout and also some nice sentiments.
Keep up the great work, and enjoy your day in the spotlight
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This is good, with a lot of nice phrases in it, but it doesn't make me feel good, thanks for taking the time to enter this lovely write.
Wyattxxx
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