The sad jazz tune upon my lips,
it is your name I sing into the winter's night,
owning the words I utter,
the name,
you.
Only the night could own such a name,
such a face.
I am but dead wood,
raking upon the waters edge.
I'm in the back and three steps behind.
I've always lost myself in your stare,
yet it is not I your gaze follows.
I've always dreamt of your warmth on my cheek,
yet find the heat arise in another face.
Swollen seawater adorns eyes,
and I know you've never thought my name.
I'm in the back and three steps behind.
Here I walk.
Whispering hope in my own ear,
as your gaze flutters past...
the one...
in the back...
and three steps behind...
yet she erupts from the mass.
Your arm candy.
Kiss giver.
Seller of her soul.
Offering it to something,
owned by night.
You play puppet-master with them.
You do not belong among them,
yet there you stand.
Finally your gaze has shifted.
You know who I am...
the one who walks three steps behind....
and I'm the one holding the scissors.
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I absolutely adore the last line there.
You keep a common theme through out.. And that I can never do.. Without being redundant.. Which you aren't.. So I applaud you for that.
Beautiful job here, your style is alright, you don't need punctuation at the end of every line though.
-Danneh<3
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Thank you very much!
I put in the punctuation to give it more of a pause feel.
The try and keep the reader from reading it too quickly.
Thanks again for reading, glad you liked it.
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This is beautifully written...i loved it!
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Thank you very much.
I am glad you liked it.
It turns mood and tables rapidly and i feared it would make it all icky, but i guess not ^^
thanks for reading!
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At first I couldn't tell where the title came into this. But in the second to last stanza it all became clear. I like how you repeated, "I'm in the back and three steps behind." The last line is really good too. I like how the tables have suddenly turned against he who thought he had them.
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thank you very much for reading
glad you liked it
and yes the last line does strike up a table turned.
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This is beautiful.
I love the end line (i'm a sucker for last lines.)
great job, thank you so much for the entry.
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Thank you
lovely contest.
evil situation, but hey i guess not everybody is ready to be loved.
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