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March Of The Undead

A blood red moon hangs low in the sky,
Dark clouds roll in obscuring the view.
A hellish laugh rings out in reply
To the sickly shaped shadows debut.
The echoes shatter all the tombstones,
The shadow brings to life all the dead.
A beast emerges from the old bones,
With a head of horns; a voice of dread.
His blazing reddish eyes pierce the dark
He summons the living dead to stand;
To follow him and to make their mark.
They leave the graveyard at his command
The undead army lead by this beast
March onward towards the city square.
Souls from their bodies will be released
When all will be crushed with none to spare.
Skulls are crushed, bones broken and blood drained
From all of those who dwell in the city.
The peoples blood will always be stained
On the beast who kills with no pity.
The undead march towards the rising sun
To destroy all until their march is done.

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  • Poemdancer
    May 1, 2008

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    wow very powerful poem. Vivid imagery and great strength in your chosen words. THe rhyming scheme is very well done, and your background and poem work very well together. The title is a bit obvious...doesn't really add to the poem but does work. I like how you changed the rhyming at the end, and i also like how your poem is like a story, beginning, middle and end. Very well written great job, keep up the great poem writing!


  • tarcus
    May 1, 2008
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    forgot the clappy.

  • PeterUL
    April 28, 2008
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    BADASS


  • VerminVomit
    April 24, 2008

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    i love it!!!!!!!!

    i really like the title
    i like the the shadow brings to life all the dead part the most...i can imagine it...kinda like in resident evil 1... like when one of..like the scientist opens her eyes...but shes dead...but alive...
    the poem paints a very vivid picture...i love it!!!!!

  • sociaL IntollErance
    December 22, 2007
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    While an excellent poem this is you have several errors in the way of punctuation and grammar

    • redmarkonthewall
      December 22, 2007
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      Thank you for the comment, and as the poet/author it is harder for me to pick out errors in my poetry especially my newest works so if you wouldn't mind point them out for my sake. Thanks,
      Redmarkonthewall

      • tarcus
        May 1, 2008

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        nO SPELLING IS WRONG IN MY EYES! PERHAPS YOU HAVE CORRECTED.
        As for grammar? poetry to me is a place where grammar can be distorted.
        very well written and imaginative piece

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