A breath of darkness
Slowly twisting
Upwards-
Spraying life
Above-
Saphire
Split in infinite
Patterns-
Diamonds follow.
Wind in hollows
Of shattered
Sky-
This is ocean-
I join it in
It's frollicking.
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now? (round 3) by just mercedes.
700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique- I can take truthful comments...
Comments
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beautiful. this is a lovely poem, well presented and formed, and a great reaction to the prompt. You let the lines take you for a wander, and found sky and ocean - all the blue things. The shape of your poem echoed the words used, very effective. Well done.
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