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~* Pity Cushion *~ (Des-Alliteration-in-Rhyme)

 

 

 

 

 

Overwhelmed by outside influences, life flat-lined
before songbird reached cliff's ridge, vision color blind.
Voice clawed to escape also cawed instead of crooned.
Beak slapped from slips and falls with fury within fists,
reasons clenched inside a ball of crystal, fate loomed;
clung to sides while transition went forward then back.

Seeker's flight destined to faulter, lies lived, Dreams doomed
after doubts attacked, chipped away Hope, self- consumed.
Eyes behind head, blinked twice but 'closed mind' resists;
pity placed cushion to soften dark blow on brow
while fog formed thick ring in ebony hue, seen faint.
Eradic events brought drought, Creator blamed, assumed.

Movements then paused, motions ceased to evolve and find,
sparks to fly, soar beside birds of prey, some presumed.
Legion of Darkness bet feathers would fray in mists
from contact with minion of mammon and Dark vow.

Energy escaped through vortex as mood persists,
worthless to worthy, once Soul took Light step, sees now.




Author notes

Prompt: Emotions

Form I created for this Challenge~
Name: Des-Alliteration-in-Rhyme
12Count syllables per line required
Minimum of one alliteration per line required
Rhyme scheme...
aabcba bbcdcb abcd cd

Medication for sedation comes with each attempt
but better than a root canal right...

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  • Amera gold member
    December 18, 2007

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    What a beautiful form and one I have not attempted as of yet. This is a breath of freash air. I love the ray of hope this instills.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Sesheta
    December 17, 2007

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    Absolutely beautiful, mind-boggling, etc. Amazing new form. Yay meds! Not sure of what else to say...you're amazing, and confusing, and I've never loved such conflict more!


  • Florida Sunshine
    December 17, 2007

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    Soars

    Desire ~ this is beautifully written ~ You did a terrific job~ I love the form ~ So many times many of us like the bird, fight to stand on familiar ground, frighten by what may come~ I can relate to this write. It does touch me ~ Thank you for your entry ~ I'm glad to see you in.

    Congrats on making it to the final round~ Truly anyone can see why you stand here~ Good luck to you ~


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    Wonderfully done, sweetie!
    I don't think I've ever met someone as multi-talented as you!
    This rocks!
    Wishing you the very best in this contest, hon!!!


  • StarEyes
    December 17, 2007

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    ~ You did it!!! I love this one, but not sure if I want to attempt This is great girl!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nettie

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