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Teaspoon

Hate is falling,
all around me.
Pain is flowing,
I drink it in.
love is crawling,
all through me.
Love controling,
my teaspoon.

Im going to dig,
Im going to hurt,
Im going to cut,
Im going to kill.
All this will be done in the name of love.
And all that will be left,

of,

you,
will not fit into,
a,

teaspoon.

Your lies and deciet,
are falling around me.
your "friends" and "lovers",
are crawling to my feet.
What did you think would happen?
You filthy fucking hypochrite,
did you think that I would soften?
well now your life is slowly spent.

Im going to dig,
Im going to hurt,
Im going to cut,
Im going to kill.
All this will be done in the name of love.
And all that will be left,

of,

you,
will not fit into,
a,

teaspoon.

Death is the only way,
to sooth all our pain.
Your hate is droping away,
into the abyss again.
my pain flows to you,
my hatred, well,
that flows too.

And all that follows through,
All in this world,
all thats left for you,
is the pain coming true.

Im going to dig,
Im going to hurt,
Im going to cut,
Im going to kill.
All this will be done in the name of love.
And all that will be left,

of,

you,
will not fit into,
a,

teaspoon.

Author notes

lyrics for my new song, dedicated to those who told us we couldnt make it. meant to be a fast heavy metal/screamo/folk maetal song so do with it what you will. any word by itself with a comma after it is meant to be held out by the singer.

A contest entry

hope you like it pls use constructive critism

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Comments

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  • BermudaHighway
    January 18, 2008
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    Hoodwinked

    This came across as angry but controlled, which I liked. The resolve to dissect someone or something from your life once and for all is an admirable thing, and you've conveyed it with alot of passion and power. Sounds like it should be a killer song!


    • DarkWind
      January 18, 2008
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      I truly hope so and since when I wrote this I had recently discovered that I can be angry and have control, that was what I was trying to do thank you.


  • SilverInk
    January 17, 2008

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    Hoodwinked!

    I agree with 'Simply Losts' idea of a song. Any talent in putting together notes? Because you sure can put words together! haha, anyways, this was enjoyable thanks for sharing!

    • DarkWind
      January 18, 2008
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      to both you and simply lost this is a song in progress almost ready to be sung...thank you for your kind words though.
      May the stars light your paths.
      DW


  • Simply Lost
    January 17, 2008
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    Hood-winked!!

    I love it! It will work perfectly as a song too! First time seeing this type of thing


  • Poetry and I Inc
    January 17, 2008

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    Hood-winked!

    This really
    presents a deeper image
    than what is at first
    evident upon first visual.
    Loved it. And it was
    different for me.

    Keep penning!

    ~The Inc."

  • sociaL IntollErance
    December 22, 2007
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    Finally someone willing to use profanity!!!

  • Vampyre Goddess
    December 18, 2007
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    ....

    This is an amazing piece. It leaves me almost without words.


  • Tigger-on-speed
    December 17, 2007

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    who told you that ud neva make it! i thought that it was brill. my first impression was that there is a lot of hate going on.

    • DarkWind
      December 18, 2007
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      theres alot of people who told me that i would never make it in the world that i would never ever be good enough.

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