Greenery charges through
scaffolding mountains,
cleaver and sage
paints tangy motifs
across the grasslands,
enveloping lush delicately
around quaint antiques
on the stoops of
whimsical homes,
cluttered by
picturesque gardens.
Victorian architecture
blossoms seamlessly in
apple colored leaves,
sparkling like tangerine stars
in ecru soil so beautifully
among suburban hills, with
symmetrical windmills;
all changing in the heart
of a forgotten season.
My eyes wander blatantly,
a faint breeze
dwindles close by,
and I am left
wishing
♥I were home now...
Author notes
I always felt my heart belonged somewhere like Ireland or Tuscany, with beautiful scenery and architecture... not in this dull desert...
I would love if someone spotlighted this poem
A contest entry
- your best work composed over the last twelve months by Lute.
600 points, ended January 9, 2008, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
let the imagery embrace your soul
Comments
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I adore how you described the scenery, I love the Victorian part in particular, great job.
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wonderful piece. i am reading this whilst driving through arizona, so being able to see a different land is very wondrous to me. great piece, o salty one!
thanks for letting me escape for a bit.
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oh awesome ^_^ I live in arizona <3
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my favorite is "tangerine stars" you have a talent for description
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Beautiful descriptions in this piece kerry
Well done
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I think it's beautiful.
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It makes me feel like I'm home in ARK. not were I am right now
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Fantastic!!
This is a true example of soulfull imagery and color, the line "all changing in the heart of a forgotten season" brings the nastalgic point of view of things we long for again, we ache for, sing about...I think your ability to pull a person into the grasslands and mountains is extraordinary! thank you so very much for sharing this. Keep up the amazing work!
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Absolutely love how you ended this with such wistful thought. Wonderful colors and texture expressed throughout.
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tis and did indeed...
(promise to self to travel...YESSS!)
w warm milk and honey
-Jas
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paints quite the soft, quiet picture.. definately a great piece of imagery.. gives off more of a rich land feeling to me.. excellent piece! :]
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Amazing, truly a beautiful work of art!!! I love your imagery.
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It feels like a picture postcard.
Not your wish for being there instead of a desert.
By the way, if you ever DO go to Italy, watch your pockets, especially in the High Season.
Or try to find a village in the hills, and make your way there.
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This is a lovely poem to enjoy.
we sailed upon the breeze of each line and verse,
and thankyou for taking us to Ireland and Tuscany!
way to write!
lovely, poem flawless flow, great lessons in this poem!
ears/Seattle
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spring has finally arrived in full force here. i just went out for errands and the mountains are going full tilt the landscape of plowed fields on the mountains fills me with a peace i've never found any where else. your poem makes me feel all that without actually seeing it. i don't come across this kind of writing often that's for sure
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Such artistry, a picture painted so well with your words. It's compelling enough to make one want to set of on a sojourn this very moment.
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A beautiful picture you have painted here, very nice job indeed. sj
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enjoyable
always glad to read such poetry as this
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Wow!
This piece spoke volumes to me. Being half irish I to want to go back to my roots (Ireland). Your poem softly grasped my mind and walked it down the road with grace. I love the subtle rhyming through out the poem. Never once did I feel it forced, or dragged out. Oh how this poem beckons my heart of green land so. Thank you for allowing me to gaze upon it's rain drop words so delicatly placed. Keep up the excellent work dear lady. Your vision of the land we seek is very captivating, and very alluring to the mind. If only for a moment to see with plain eyes we shall endulge ourselves till hearts content, bravo.
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Excellente
In case you don't know that is spanish for excellent. ; ) This is a good piece! What I like is the very original description and how the picture you paint is very concrete. If only I could.....(sigh).....Oh well. Some people just have all the luck.
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Lovely imagery.
I enjoyed the poem very much. I live in green Scotland where it never stops raining, desert sounds good to me.You conveyed the sense of being misplaced and home being elsewhere. The poem has a haunting, mystical quality. You certainly placed me somewhere else. I confess I had to look up ecru.
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very good poem, beautiful words, your rhyme flows so wonderfully. I can relate with your unhappiness of being somewere boaring and lifeless, heck, I moved from beautiful British Columbia, to Arkansas, I think that's pretty self explanitory.God bless, have a wonderful day.
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Damn, this is good!
This is an extaordinary piece, filled to the brim with rich imagery. Nature has always been one of my personal favorite topics to read about, so this really hit the spot for me. I will definitely spotlight this piece. This is writing on a level that I know I can aspire to. Don
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content 7.5
vocabulary 11
accuracy 6.2
creativity 7
theme 7
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Aww so pretty! Arizona can't be so bad... I'd love to live in a green beautiful place too.
Lovely words!
Sorath
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You suck the reader right in.. you are great writer... very talented.. keep it up.. thanks for sharing
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You have the talent to go far with your poetry. There are many aspects of good writing in this poem. For example, your vivid beginning to grab the reader's immediate attention and your consistent use of unique and colorful words to keep the reader's interest.
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Lovely descriptions!
This was a soft and delicate weave of nostalgia.You painted a picture with your words!
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i know how you feel about ireland... ive never been there thru fate but been very close. have always dreamed about it at night for as long as i can remember and feel i lived there in a past life. in the meantime show me a place like that here and im moving lol. absolutely beautiful,
georgie,
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I've never been either but I am almost fully irish I feel like I belong there you know
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it is a very relaxing poem. you have written it very well. it's quit beautiful how you describe it all.
it flows very nicley! I really like your ending, even though it's kind of sad... .
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first of all I would like to state I have many favorites and so glad you are one of them. You have a brillant way of stating things.
Your first verse is busy and sophisticated, your second verse is simple and ellegant, the last verse states just how you feel and wish things were today. You keep the reader tied and very interested.
once again great job
keep the ball flowing till the ink runs dry
Happy Holidays
Tamara
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A wonderful write. I often feel i belong somewhere different myself. this makes me wanna get away. great job.
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"sparkling like tangerine stars
in ecru soil so beautifully
among suburban hills, with
symmetrical windmills;" the imagery and picture that you give me here is so vivid and clear. i love it. it held my attention throughout the piece and made me a bit nostalgic and homesick at the end -
Charming
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ah but the desert or I should say arizona does have its own beauty. I know I used to live just out of the white mountains. but then I do enjoy nature in all its beauty!
one just has to open their eyes to see it!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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Ah, I am with you every step of the way on that mental Journey...I also feel drawn to Tuscany and Ireland...do you live in Arizona or something?
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Arizona indeed
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