Don't cry my little one,
the tears'll only stain your soul.
Don't weep for me, my precious babe,
it will not bring me home.
I've gone to heav'n from mine own hand,
Couldn't wait to see the so-called "Promise Land".
Don't wait for me, my darling child,
the yearning will leave you cold.
Don't try to understand, my love,
in this world I was all alone.
I've gone to heav'n from mine own hand,
Couldn't wait to see the so-called "Promise Land"
Don't let this wretched world steal your flame.
For your sorrow and confusion,
you've only me to blame.
I've gone to heav'n from mine own hand,
Couldn't wait to see the so-called "Promise Land"
Author notes
i wrote this poem...um...a couple months ago i guess. a friend's mother had recently killed herself...she left behind several young grandchildren. The 3 that I know are 3 years old, 2 and a 1 year old. i didn't have the privilege of knowing her, but from what i understand she was a wonderful mother and grandmother. i imagine leaving her family was hard...but i guess living was harder.
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Remarkable solemn piece. You brought across the emotions and sense of tragedy with masterful prose. Was a fantastic write.
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WOW......just WOW.......i i dont kno wim speechless. i thought it was amazing terrible amazing....it was painful reading it, in a sense that teh emotion that u was trying to portray bled out, it couldnt be ocntained, everything about it was just so beautiful, th eemotion, rhyming the repeition in 'I've gone to heav'n from mine own hand,
Couldn't wait to see the so-called "Promise Land"'
ow my fave part, I loved it and teh story behidn it is majorly sad aswell ;( its a shame as to what happened -
This is very sad and very touching.
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you werent disrespectful at all i thank you for entering this truely brought a tear to my eye i love the way it flows and it is a beautifully written piece thank you for sharing
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A touching poem, enjoyed it very much...... I feel for the grandchildren...
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An outright tragedy when this happens! Your write is soft yet has an underlying intensity about it. It's gentle yet moves the reader down the storyline steadily. And, the thought that this person has left someone young behind.... OMG... now that is the biggest aspect of this tragedy. People often forget the ones they are leaving in the moment of things... for if they remembered, they wouldn't do it at all.
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WOW!!!! This is so sad and heart wrenchingly beautiful! Amazing write but it left me deeply sad...great job and good luck you have done exactly what i wanted...sorry about your friend though....so sad, give her or him my deepest sympathies!
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...its good.
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