bubbles
some fly safely
way up in the sky,high
others, burst just two feet off the ground
that's life
Picture by:
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A contest entry
- 48 hour Cinquain Contest by azure85.
600 points, ended December 19, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellent
write! the form is perfect and the metaphor is priceless!
indeed...your observations spill into poetic magic...
this is a great poem...rich and leaves me with a chuckle...for I am the bubble that always bursts...
into a smile when viewing your words...
thank you!
Blessings! Tammy
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oh how sweet you are Tammy!! I love to burst you bubble that way
Thank you my Ap friend
Mary
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A delightful cinquain, with alot of truth in it! A very good use of the form, your L5 is great, thank you so much.
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i love this! these short forms are great. say much with few words. shows just how talented you are! thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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Thank you Debilynn!!! How sweet you are to give such a kind comment and bless you for adding me as a fav!!!
GBY
SilverButterfly
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Very nicely written. Sometimes even the smallest observations in life make for a great poem!
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thank you so much for your kind comment and I'm very glad you understood what I was attempting to say!!!
GBY
SilverButterfly
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This is the type of poem i love. You can take it symbolically and use it as a metaphor or simply see it for what it is. Nice Write.
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I appreciate the fact that you got what I was trying to say!! Thank you so much for the comment
GBY
SilverButterfly
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