I counted d|o|w|n the lies
That they told us
t*o*d*a*y
~↓1↓2↓~
~↓1↓1↓~
~↓1↓0↓~
Not many,,,
for the hour
And not many,,,
but enough for me
to d≈r≈o≈w≈n
with ┼ you.
There’s a [B][R][I][C][K]
tied to me…
∙it’s ∙d∙r∙a∙g∙g∙i∙n∙g∙ me
D
O
W
N
W
I
T
H
Y
O
U
&I can’t stop it a ⁿ y m ŏ r ė.
Ťhey will place a † ĆŖŌŞŜ†
a^b^o^v^e us
R-e-m-i-n-d-i-n-g us of the
~L~I~E~S~
Ŵ Є ď i e d f o r.
Author notes
Ok then.. This is my first attempt at dirty pretty.. and its roughly based on the image from my contest ~L-i-a-r~
Don't be too cruel...
Please tell me what you think
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I love this. If you wouldn't have said it was your first time I would have thought you been writing dp all the time. Nice Job!
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This is my first look at dirty pretty (I never knew what it was) but it works well although it's a little difficult yo read. The context is very good though, and the running metaphor and imagery works very well. Great work
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I like this piece Claire-Anne. I'm not a big fan of dirty pretty, but you've done well with it in this piece.
It's wonderfully written.
Bravo Dear
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It has been quite awhile since I read anything from you my lovely sister. I enjoyed this dirty pretty piece of yours and I'm not normally a fan for that... but you make it work. Very nice.
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Lol. Thanks Darls.. I write when i write, i dont really sit myself down to write a billion poems a day that i know are going to be really bad.. would rather have one good poem every few days/weeks.. and when im not depressed i dont write as much, which is probably a goood thing.
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love the different punctuation, very unique and new types... love it.
Love the theme too, it's very different but I love it. Religion, beliefs, sexuality, all the things you can be judged for, are the bringers down of the earth. We judge each other, when we really should agree to disagree.
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Oh I like this! Dirty Pretty seems quite hard to do. This must have taken you ages. I like the poem itself as well. Well done wth this
Gaylene
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Lmao Grandmama.. I think it was just more fun finding all the symbols and stuff...
It took me a while, if it was compared to a freeverse poem of the same length.. 
Thanks for the comment though Grandmama.. Muahs.
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lol umm intsing darling
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Hate it. Nah actually, I love the words!! Amazing poem, and to me it's not a horrible dirty pretty write I've seen worse. Good job. And did you go nuts getting all the punctuation?
Beautiful bubbi 
Hey there's a contest I know of that this would fit into.... LMAO
♥
Bandaid.
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What... It was fuuun.. a hellova lotta fun.. just getting all the punctuation.. Ok, so small minds..
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Lol you cork. Dude. Make the writing a bit brighter...
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