All my life I was the different one.
The in between one,
the "Hey white girl" one.
The "ooh you got good hair" one,
the "yea right" one.
The almost fits in one,
the too light for blacks and too black for whites one.
The mixed one,
the "if only you were darker" one.
The "poser" one,
the having to always prove myself one.
The "you sound so white" one,
the in your face, trying to express my race one.
The strong independent one.
The beat a nigga down one,
the kick a bitch ass one.
The person you looked at like "no" one,
the women trying to make a life for her family one.
The you don't know me one,
the don't come at me with that bullshit one.
The get out my face one,
the true to my soul one.
All my life I had to defend myself.
I know who I am, do you?
I'm an Intelligent, Strong, Beautiful, Funny, mixed,
Puerto Rican and Black one,
the don't get it twisted, one.
A contest entry
- Battling Your Monsters by szne416.
500 points, ended December 20, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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I like this one. You forgot, "the owe nobody shit one".
This is another poem that draws the reader right into your personality.
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well done just great poem :)
brillent poenm stright from the truth of your reality
nothing more bful than that love it thank you for writing this
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Strong emotional write that's full of voice and your identity, good job!
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this is pretty cool. the repetiiton of 'one' was erally effective.
a strong and honest write - well don!
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I like this a lot. I get the impression of going though all that crap but gaining immense inner strength from it. You have a strong sense of identity in this poem, and its obvious you like who you are.
Congratulation on your trophy. -
I think this is quite a good poem. My only comment would be that maybe your single lines should be at regular intervals. (like after every block of two stanzas) instead of random. Very good display of emotion.
Nakatrea
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a fantastic write on the perceptions of differances when we know who we are we can move mountains
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That is very personal to me. I can understand where you are coming from despite me being a crazy white girl
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A+
This was very good. from start to finish. you got a way with words sis.
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Excellent My Dear
This was very good poetry and carries a lot of meaning with it. Thanks for the comment on my poem "WE THE PEOPLE" (I think that was the name of it.) But I always try to return the favor(s) of critique. I have seen your name pop up a few times on my other friends poetry and would just like to say "HELLO". Will talk soon I hope.
"BOO"
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Stand up for who you really are!!! Proud to be who you are!!! I AM PROUD!!! Sorry. Anywas the poem that was wonderful. It shouldn't matter about any of that but just who you really are. A sweet caring person. Well you get the point. Thanks for the read and keep it up. BE PROUD!
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good job gal...u still dont look black though lol
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Itz an Anthem! hotness!
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that's tight.
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usually i hate profanity in poetry, but in your case it makes sense and makes me believe you and what it must be like. love lines 26-30
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