Snow falls gently to the ground
Candles glow from the mantle
Casting gentle shadows upon ornaments,
precisely placed.
But you're there,
the center of the room.
Shaming the brilliant ornaments with your beauty
My eyes fixed upon your frame,
standing strongly in the doorway.
Your smirk can be seen in the dim light,
sending shivers down my spine.
Our embrace as magical as the Christmas season.
Sparks flying as our hands touch.
Kisses ignited by blazing passions deep within.
The snowy world outside forgotten,
nothing but flames burning in our eyes.
Our love spills from every seam.
Our hearts becoming one, our minds so in sync.
My soul yearns for yours and you answer.
My every question consoled,
with a gentle caress.
My heart, mind and body are yours.
You fill my senses, my thoughts are foggy.
Our passions explode in a heated finish.
Our bodies tired and our minds at peace.
Your arms hold me tightly and we sleep,
if only for a moment.
Author notes
My first try at anything like this, I like it, I hope you enjoy it as well. Constructive criticism is definitely welcome.
A contest entry
- Show me a sensual Christmas by Dusty Rose.
900 points, ended December 25, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Best Adult 17+ by WillAlwaysLove.
600 points, ended January 7, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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What a beautifully romantic, holiday poem. I liked it. The flow was wonderful. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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I loved it!this was turly inspired!hmm...you've got some pretty powerful word-combinations in here!loved the atmosphere also!well done indeed!keep it up and good luck in the contest!
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The one line I liked that I haven't heard in a lot of places is
" Our passions explode in a heated finish "
I really enjoyed this piece a lot and I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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Well I actually have no constructive criticism to give you... I loved this write.. It is very romantic, and graciously done... Very nice. Thank you so much for entering.. And good luck.
Dusty
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