A misty rain shrouds the land,
Water cascades down the sand.
The air is caught with anticipation.
At last heard, unknown accusation.
Can you feel it? It's come at last,
The wind is roaring a cold icy blast.
I stand wistfully on sea shore,
It's going to happen just like before.
The monster is rising and taking control,
I feel it coming, it's after my soul.
I hear him yell... Nicole, Nicole.
I don't run away, but I know I should,
It's happened before, I have never withstood.
At last it's upon me, taking my breath.
It's settled at last, my certain death.
It's happened before, always the same,
The monster has won, my soul he does claim.
My eyes go dark, as this is the end,
Myself I just can no longer defend.
He loses all his self-control,
I hear him yell... Nicole... Nicole.
Author notes
Well my friend Nicole had this really weird dream once. I got to thinking about it and this is what I drew from it. In honor of her, I used her name. Hope you enjoyed.
By the way, the monster was a storm. That's why I set in on the beach.
Also, I should have put this in here sooner, part of the reason I even wrote this poem was based off of a picture from a contest... I just sort of changed a tiny bit. Which is why I didn't submit it from the start.
(For a contest) I used option eleven.
Peace out peoples,
'Manda (Aka: fogwolf.) ^.^
A contest entry
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Comments
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The imagery is awesome ~ as you carry me along in the dream ~ the rhyme doesn't seem forced~ and the flow moves the piece flawlessly~ I would of enjoyed reading more! ~
Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" Contest ~ I really appreciate you sharing your work with me~ Good luck to you
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Thank you for your kind words.
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Wow. Very well written. Definitely draws a vivid image in the mind as the reader reads it. No grammatical/ spelling errors that I saw. Just an very well thought out work of art. Well done.
Also, congrats on being the 1st to enter a poem for the picture prompt. Here is your applause for doing so.
Glad it inspired you, if even just a little bit.
~*DJ*~
P.S. Thanks for following the rules and good luck in my contest. Also, have a very safe and Happy Holiday season and please be patient as I'm wanting a lot of entries and will continue extending the deadline until then...
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Thank you. I do my best to avoid errors of any sort, I find they make it very difficult to enjoy a poem. Happy Holidays
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Woo, dark! I enjoyed this poem a lot. Very well written. At first I was critical of using a name to make a rhyme work, but then I read your author notes and understood why you chose to use a name in the poem so it works here perfectly. Thank you for sharing!
-Tim (Astral Flare)
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I love this it is full of emotion and so much flare.
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