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alone in life afraid in death

what should i do?
what should i feel?
how can this be?
its not, its not real.

unanswered questions
each a pain all their own
no one to go to
no place to call home

each sigh comes with pain
each inhale, each breath
the only fate that
I avoid now is death

theres a point, a purpose
i know it i swear
but to find what it is,
i dont know if i dare.

so for now, i will stay
each breath deepening pain
for no matter the hurt
i will not be slain




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  • Topnotchsy
    June 24, 2008

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    It gets stereotyped and classified. It is discussed from by people as an intellectual discussion with little emotion or even really interest, but the quest to discover the purpose of life is something that plagues most who are willing to think about it (and don't feel they've found the answer.)
    Nice write. I'm with you on this one. No matter how bad life seems, I'd rather stay here and continue growing/learning than give it up and find out later what I missed.


  • Somebody-New
    May 9, 2008

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    this is a really well written piece
    there is a lot of feeling and emotion behind your words
    and the rhyming seems to flow very well... the last line for me was defintely the most powerful, i loved it, great write, and thanks for your comments on my work
    xo


  • xPink-Lotusx
    April 3, 2008

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    Some of the best poetry sometimes is simple. It means you didn't think to much about the write, you just wrote what you were feeling. And to me, emotion and feeling are more important than structure, form or rhyme.. But I still liked the structure form and rhyme in this piece.. Very well done.

  • Tburtonluvr
    December 22, 2007

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    I luv it!!! My favorite line is " for matter the hurt I will not be slain." It means so much to me. Thank you for writting this poem


  • ellipsist
    December 21, 2007

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    the ending, to me is the most powerful... a bit repetitive and the rhyme scheme a bit simplistic and a little bit forced feeling in places, as the rhythm seems to change, but other than those two small qualms, well written indeed...

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