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Kiss Me Love

Knots of little butterflies that led a conga
In our stomachs  [were]
Suddenly released and freed to flutter
Swiftly, around Blissful Obliviousness
Molded in the form of you and I.
Each of us painted in fluorescent flames

Life around us fading in the background
One subtle symphony of pounding hearts
Voicelessly wording all the essentials
Each of us swearing, in that one moment—
                  the world stood still in fleeting perfection. 

Author notes

acrostic. Still working on the spacing.... arggggg

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 20, 2008

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    This is so beautiful and subtle. Wonderful acrostic.
    ♥
    whisper


  • InMyFlames
    January 18, 2008
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    So beautiful, nice work


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    January 10, 2008

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    Now that is a kiss! when time seems to stand still and all others disappear...sighs...breath taking thank you kindly for sharing and for entering


  • downbythestationn
    January 6, 2008

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    simplisticly beautiful

    I love the thought of butterflies dancing the conga in stomachs Also the personaification of "Blissful Obliviousness molded in the form of you and I".
    Simple and beautiful thoughts with a perfect last ending line.