Your silence is as the flakes of snow
that drift effortlessly down
and silently join forces
until everything is covered
and our senses are overwrought
trying to remember and discern
how things used to be before
our world was inundated and chilled.
Your silence is also as the icicles
that come and form unannounced
yet become as it were daggers to the heart
threatening to to put asunder the tender ties
we used to have in more hospitable times.
Why is it that the dead freeze of winter
has overtaken our hearts and lives
to form a wedge between the two of us
and to numb us from the feelings
which were so strong and vibrant?
Now I look out and I see
Only the obliterating whitewash
of the uncaring frozen tundra
reinforced by the treacherous daggers
lined up as stoic sentinels
guarding the outer walls
from allowing access to the home-fires
once crackling with delight within,
now reduced, also to smoldering embers.
A contest entry
- PRE-WRITES GALLORE ~!~!~! by Naridill.
800 points, ended January 31, 2008, 138 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
point out misspellings or things I can improve upon in a kind and friendly way--THANKS!
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Thank You SULFANE for honoring my poem with an honorable mention is your contest extravaganza!
I was happy to have a part in it.
God Bless You,
David -
Beautiful. From beginning to end - the phrasing is simply amazing and beautifully done.
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beautiful! an incredible take on the prompt - very poignant - particularly, for me, the second stanza! powerful!
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congratulations on the win. you are such a good poet. an honor to be in this contest with you.
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Excellent Poem Good Luck In The Contest !!
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