It’s too easy to forget, day by day,
The silent moments, the speechless glance,
The unexpected touch of one
When none
But you would stay to take a final chance.
It’s too easy to stand mute and turn aside,
Assume that what was meant was said,
And let you pass, untouched, unthanked,
Love banked
Like ashes one would hide, cold and dead.
Much harder then, to speak, to touch, caress,
Be constant in returning grace for grace;
Ensure that you might always know
I owe…
And abide to bless your heart’s embrace.
A contest entry
- A Christmas Challenge - Priceless Gifts by thelordreigns.
900 points, ended December 26, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 15,000) - Part 4 Love by cricketjeff.
1250 points, ended December 27, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Form of Love by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended January 4, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Gentle and pure!
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Thank you. Just how I hoped the poem would be read.
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Very good job on this ...
as usual. Good luck in the contests and Happy New Year since it's now coming up on us so fast. -
Thank you for your second entry in our contest to find the best rhymer, we're sorry you were not lucky this time, please join us in further contests.
All the best Sue and Jeff
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This is a very nice piece of writing
Well done and thank you for entering x
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Beautiful expression of the power and blessing of stretching a bit beyond one's own comfort zone to communicate appreciation to another. Compelling "let you pass, untouched, unthanked, love banked". Far too often, we assume those around us 'just know' what a difference they make in our lives. I enjoyed this very much.
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Well, you've done it ...
you managed to write a rhymed poem that flowed to casually that I didn't even notice it rhymed until I went back and looked at it. Quite a job here.
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Thank you. A true and much appreciated compliment. That was part of what this poem was about, and intricate structure of medial and terminal rhyme to counterbalance simplicity of thought. It's a lot like Judi, in fact, with much more happening inside than one might think. Again, thanks.
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Beautiful done. Nice use of singular rhymn to tie each verse in place. A graceless phrase that suddenly falls in place reflects so nicely the message set in this poem's good grace. Simple, humble and yet a beautiful gift to the heart in the end.
Peace,
Tom B.
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Beautiful love poem! Good luck in the contest!
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This is a delicate and beautiful gift to your loved one.
Thank you for entering my contest.
God bless you abundantly this Christmas and always.
- joanne
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