In bed i lay in a comatose state
drifting through parrellel planes.
My eye's are glazed and twitching
in a celestial universe of delusion.
The subconscious mind twists in frost
and winds through vivid fantasy.
A hazy resonation of winters glaze dazzles
glinting sparks of animation.
The lines of reality blur through REM
as my entrancing solitude crystalizes.
This terrene glitters with walls of
glass and sapphire luminism.
Buildings of ice and prismatic semblence
radiate against skies of gold.
A cobalt stallion of transparent crystal
prances amongst stars that sparkle through time.
Fantasia castles blur dimensions where
lithium froze prosthetic thoughts of existence.
An arctic horse encompasses this realm with
outstretched wings of polished glacier.
Beating,
striking,
dashing through
angelic lullabies where
Immortal hooves turn ice to gold.
Psychosomatic collapse leads to
a lethargic psyche
::where reality no longer exists::
Gelid light floods the soul,
awashing over a silicon world of paradise.
Reflection glares off polished ground
and shimmers off this placid flood.
Liquid dreamland decked in gems
Ice transcends through caves of snow.
This place of desolate isolation
Sings a winter symphony.
Aesthetic realm gleams hauntingly
midst a mirrored reverie.
Author notes
I could have done SO MUCH MORE with this piece and maybe i still will.....mom is bitching and scremaing at me right now, and this house is a fuckin MAD HOUSE. I can't concentrate worth a damn.
HERE'S THE PICTURE THAT INSPIRED THIS POEM, IT'S REALLY BEAUTIFUL:
http://i113.photobucket.com/albums/n225/rottweiler132000/Picture097Large.jpg
A contest entry
- I want emotion! by TwiztidMaggot.
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A beautiful piece, love the pic to. I know what you mean about mad house, its a wonder I write anything at all some days An inspiring write, superb I think I need to swallow a dictionary...maybe then my muse will return...?
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HAHA, i swallowed a COUPLE DICTIONARIES!
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It was fun using an expanded vocab on this though, F-U-N! -
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So that's the trick!! Good job I resemble a wide mouth frog then
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this is a piece to watch out for, love it thanks for entering
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This was well written. No doubt. Lots of images and great word usage. Good luck in the contest.
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"Psychosomatic collapse leads to
a lethargic psyche
::where reality no longer exists::"
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This place of desolate isolation
Sings a winter symphony.
Aesthetic realm gleams hauntingly
midst a mirrored reverie."
are my favorite lines!
i love the poem because it was easy for me to follow and i actually placed myself in the setting you described.
*high fives ya*
lol go you!
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This just goes to show what an Excellent Poet you are Synth!! The images you portrayed jumped out and slapped my senses into submission...Damn fine piece of work!!
All the best,
~T.S~
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YAY!
LOL. Glad you liked it, it's the wierdest thing, if you look through my poetry, it's my murder/serial killer/gore infested ones that get lots of comments. haha. Weird, eh??? I wouldn't thnk it would be that way...
this piece is very different from my normal style BUT THE PICTURE WAS JUST TO AWE INSPIRING TO PASS UP!!!!!!
^_^
Thanks for your comment (and in my opinion, i'm not talented at all....)
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You've always been great at bringing out emotion in those who read your writing, maybe your choice in which emotion you chose is different but the fact that you did it so well doesn't really surprise me at all. You always write with so much emotion and put so much of it into your writings that you could write about almost anything and do it well as long as you care about it.
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You did a wonferful job here!!! Who would have thought that would have such a tender side to you??? So different than most of your writes that I am in awe as well!!! Very beautiful images you have conveyed here and it does the picture justice!!!! Best of luck in the contests my friend......
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SURPRISED, EH???? I saw the picture and it was just......to impressive. I felt such a strong urge to write about it that i wasted no time! LOL
For some reason, the picture seems to give me peace, REALLY strongly.
I'm still pissed about someone complaining about Wayne's piece and the person who bitched about it. JUST TOTALLY WHAT-THE-FUCK
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Awe. I'm in awe of this. It's really cool.
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AWWW! THANKYOU SO MUCH!
I'm hoping to make it better later on when i get the chance. I gotta go.....but i'll fix the flaws and stuff laterz!
THANKS MUCH FOR YOUR COMMENT! AND I HOPE LIKE MAD YOU JOIN THE CONTEST!
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