Broken by lies.
Broken from hate,
Broken because of all.
Falling into hell,
Doesn’t seem so bad,
Maybe I’ll finally be alone.
Disappear from the world,
The lies and the words,
The promises that are cast away.
The hurt may just end,
The pain may just kill,
Death the only friend to the end.
Author notes
"I am 25 or under"
A contest entry
- Write Like Dahl! by David J Martin.
450 points, ended December 17, 2007, 8 entries
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Comments
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This is really powerful and definitely true that the greatest pain we may ever feel is when promises are broken. Very nicely written with strong emotion and word choice; thanks for adding to the reading list!
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Lovely raw emtions and feelings in your words...deep and heartfelt, moving...strong words of flow and choice...well done...
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The second stanza really packed a punch. The last line was perfect for the poem. I like the imagery here and the message you gave to the reader.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Always,
Cassie
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Nice.
This is a nice poem, but imagry is lacking, at least to me. It's a fairly good write, with some nice, raw emotion. The message is wel received though!
And I also want to thank you for following the rules and putting "Earthquake! Duck!" in your author's notes! -
Thank You.
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Some very raw emotion in your poem. Very well expressed, and nicely written. I can't see how it has been inspired by Roald Dahl, but I'm sure it will be well received in the other contest you have entered. Good luck.
Drayton.
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