My heart flipped,
My soul collapsed within,
Happiness seemed distant
I suddenly wished I had never met you,
Due to all the hurt you have now done
It was beautiful
What we had.
Yet now I know,
It was all a lie
A contest entry
- A love that was never real but the pain after was by MysteriousMoonlight.
875 points, ended December 29, 2007, 58 entries
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This reminds me of when I found out my ex was using me to get to my bf. Sad but then again it reminds me of how he looked when my friend rejected him:-) I hate him now but I have to be a little nice to him cause he is dating my bff. Well I'll stop chattering about that. Excellent work. You'll see this as one of my favorites.
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So short but so good!I loved the flow and choice of words! It's a great poem! Good luck int he contest!
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Good write here
So often the young and old are prayed upon by selfish uncaring men only looking for one thing and once they become satified they move on like a bat in the night . Women should scar those men so as to warn others of their uncaring ways and left with nothing for it is so cruel to play with anothers heart
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Great write. I love the emotions that fall from your pen. You have done a great job. Keep on penning my friend.
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Heartbreak
is painful, I have felt your pain. Good write.
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i made someone feel like that before....
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short & to the point. Nice
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