in a movie theater’s
darkness;
long past
the love story’s credits
and closing of doors.
Author notes
prompt - where are you?
15 words
A contest entry
- Where are you? by Naridill.
300 points, ended December 18, 2007, 31 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Gold - 20 words or less by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended March 23, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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another fine fine poem. It is short and powerful and the reader knows exactly what this is about. I hate to leave a theatre and go out into the sun when my heart and soul is left upon the lips of a final, sad kiss of a great movie ...
this is so excellent, it should be considered very publishable.
the title is just so obvious and so surprising at the same time ... very very fine work ... congrats
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incredible imagery...
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I am still here, frozen in this moment of time
The iceman cometh not.superb imagery, as always...loved yours~~~Artis
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what and no one bought an ice cream off you, the tight things
ah seriously though, a good peice with just using the 15 words
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ohhhhh I really loved the poem and in such few words, you left me a feeling of the words like they were my own thoughts...Excellent ~blessings always~ Trisha
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This gives a longing feel and sort of a lonely repine.
Very unsuaul but extremely effective. Congrats on the gold it was well deserved.
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oooh.
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congrats!
on the well deserved gold beautiful!!!
well done...
this is poignant and powerful ink...
I'm still sitting in the theater too...LOL...I'm the red head in the back...waiting to leave so no one sees me crying...
I love how you can take a moment and pen into epic meaning...in so few words...
truly I envy and admire your pen...
I AM YOUR BIGGEST FAN...
Blessings! Tammy
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awwwee, Tammy, thank you so much
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How did I miss this one?!?
This is so beautifully sad and heartbreaking. Sadly, I know that feeling all too well.
Congrats on the well deserved gold!
hugs!
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- just my reaction from such a divine piece.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck.
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The closing moment watching a movie reminds me of how I wish I could have seen more or probably be there (If the movie is really good).
Though what I always like after a movie is the thoughts that sink in my soul. The dust of wisdom, story, and perspective I have seen.
With this one, I can feel the sadness...very much of it.
A beautiful succinct piece.
Cheer up my friend.
HENSLEY a.k.a VIRGOAN
P.S.
Tara, remember that after one movie there will always be another one.
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Wow... wow wow wow... excellent! brilliant Tara... just wow!
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lingering...
Oh...! This could be taken in a number of different ways! Very clever writing my friend... Excellent!
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There is so much emotion in this piece; it's creative and heartfelt...and in so few words too! i think that's amazing. Loved this!!
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Such effective use of imagery and brevity. Brilliant metaphor--the empty theater, dark and lonely. I think the line "long past" really intensifies the feeling of this.
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Oh, man, I have been to movies that have doen that to me... Bridges Of Madison County.... for one, where I had to sit and collect msyelf....
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thanks for your comment, Carol, I found it very useful, in fact, I used the word 'collecting' instead...then took that out too...LOL.....
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Ah, yes, I have done this too...sort of a zen moment in the many minutes of heart ache.
Good luck in the contest.
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Soul Soothing Sadness...
Sighhh... I see you there, I feel your presence.
You're not alone, Poet...
"the love story’s credits
and closing of doors."
A Soulful Sigh, Scribe.
~ Nicky♥
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beautiful - a metaphor so powerful in its simplicity... amazing, especially for such brevity, so few words...
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:~}
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Love this as a metaphor for being in love. Really beautiful. At least that is how I read it
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Wow
I am speechless
Totally speechless.
Becky
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There is a haunting sadness to this...a loneliness. Excellent in its brevity and emotion. I really like this one
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Poignant write here which I felt was quite sad. Good luck in the contest. I liked the subtlety and imagery here.
Thanks for your comment
All the best
Pozo
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WOW... this is such a powerful piiece for so few words
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Excellent.
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