He was a country boy,
She was a city girl.
It was never gonna work out,
But they pressed on.
They fell in love,
But she had to leave,
To attend school far away.
And he was left alone.
While away, Allie recieved no letters form him,
In 365 days she forgot of their love,
She met another seven years later,
She was happy.
While she was gone,
Noah sent her a letter each day for a year,
365 letters in all,
He loved her very much,
But never got a reply.
Allie's mother got the mail each day,
365 days,
A letter from her daughter's lover, every day,
Whom she despised,
So she hid the letters one and all.
Now engaged,
The Allie goes for a trip,
And she sees noah there,
And they fall in love all over again.
But she forgets of her husband,
Noah has his love back,
And tries to convince Allie to stay,
With him,
But Allie says no,
And she goes away.
Allie's husband, back at home,
Tells her to do what she wants,
and that he loves her, no matter what.
The next day, her car pulls into the Noah's driveway,
And she is there to stay.
Author notes
I saw the movie "The Notebook" yeaterday, and I loved it. Although it was probably rated "R" (I didn't check) it was very good. The story is much more complicated then I wrote, and explained.
And I am starting to be inspired by little things, like Emma, uh oh, 100 poems, here I come!
so?
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Nice
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I like this poem a lot. It's really cute. But you said form instead of from, which slowed the flow. Also it's kind of confusing when it says "she falls in love again but forgets about her husband.." then she goes away which I assume is to her husband? maybe? idk, just a suggestion.
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I think you're off to a good start, but usually poems written about movies, tributes, etc . . .are harder to comprehend as a poem. They usually don't sound as much like a poem, more like prose. I don't feel emotion here, and I cannot feel the beat. Some of the lines make me feel like, "Oh . . .okay." I think there's something more here to improve on . . .like "flow." I respect you for writing a poem about a movie though, because even though I've been writing for a long time, and inspiration comes easily to me, I would never be able to acheive such a feat as writing about Pirates of the Caribbean! I give you credit for what you're doing.
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thanks for the tips, and kind complements. i'll think about it,
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