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Hunting Season

 

Your screaming is harmony to my ears,
just my kind of merry, festive cheer.
Seeing you sweat in blood and pain,
a joy usually so very hard to attain.

Breathing your fear on everything,
like sweet carols that children sing.
Watching you gnaw your own pulp,
your face twisting with each sorry gulp.

The moments over, now time to fulfill,
devil is on my shoulder screaming kill, kill, kill.
You whimper and whine, when you see me,
knowing full well I won't set you free.

Gazing at you writhing, I do declare
I'll try to be quick, so please don't despair.
The devil is calling for brutal torment,
I feel like I'm sinking, a bleak descent.

Hunger is taking over, slow but sure,
trying not to smile is difficult to endure.
Hiding's hard behind my bitter disguise,
incoherent ramblings of ones pitiful demise.

Rage running deep, patience wears thin,
Slitting your throat, I allow hunger to win.
Clutching at veins I guzzle as you bleed,
tearing flesh from bones to feed my greed.

The cold air gives me a chill,
hunting now for a brand new thrill,
fresh blood needed for me to kill,
my insatiable hunger, so crucial to fulfill.

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 9, 2008

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    Stunning!!!

    STUNNING BRUTAL IMAGERY HERE!

    The flow of words and the imagery that they produced

    was outstanding in this piece.

    Amazing how words can do that.

    You are really very good indeed. Keep writing.

    I felt the fear pain and torment of the victim here.

    I actually took this to be Man, out hunting,

    rather then an animal hunting an animal.

    Only Man would think such thoughts

    brought forth in this piece.

    Well done.
    Brilliant writing

    Much love
    Wayne Leon
    :):F


  • WolfHeart
    January 25, 2008

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    Oh, wow! You are going to be a fave. This was just too delicious for words! Greatest of darkness.

    Wolfie


  • Stormy Days
    January 23, 2008

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    imagery is great you give a lot of discreaption wow i love the line Dvil is on my shoulder creaming kill, kill, kill. amazing this is good


  • Timespell
    January 5, 2008

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    Great Imagination...

    My head was filled with a never ending picture, which would turn more gruesome leading towards the end.

    If I had to pick my Favorite Part it would be this:

    The moments over, now time to fulfill,
    devil is on my shoulder screaming kill, kill, kill.
    You whimper and whine, when you see me,
    knowing full well I won't set you free.

    HEHEHE... Yeah thats the one...LOL

    All the best,

    ~T.S~


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    December 27, 2007

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    *mouth hangs open*

    i wish like FUCKIN MAD i was this talented.....
    omg I FLIPPIN LOVED THIS! I STILL LOVE IT!
    You know, i could read this 100 times over and not grow sick of it, it's addicting......writing like this, isn't it?!
    lol
    AW HELL, YOU ARE THE BEST! I especially loved this paragraph, it made me orgasm

    *grins*

    "Rage running deep, patience wears thin,
    Slitting your throat, I allow hunger to win.
    Clutching at veins I guzzle as you bleed,
    tearing flesh from bones to feed my greed."


  • PastelMoons gold member
    December 25, 2007

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    Your words against this macabre background
    really felt a complete darkness.
    Chilling..I honestly don't know how
    you do this over and over with each
    read being fresh and new!
    must be great talent!!
    Love this!
    ~Pastel


  • Creatress
    December 25, 2007

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    wowza, it was fun to get my dark side on..the poem really pulls you in. great powerful write. really enjoyed it.
    rock on
    Creatress


  • InMyFlames
    December 23, 2007
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    nice very well written a good word flow and choice


  • Arizona Sunset
    December 16, 2007

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    *faints* the queen of the dark writers you are!!! love this sissy, best to you in the contest ~blessings always~


  • CherryOnTop
    December 16, 2007

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    Oh!!My goodness!!I am but a babes when it comes to this stuff compared to you. Truly awessome and amazing.
    Kept me on the seat of my chair.

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