My voice unheard, torn in barren drought.
For I'm just an infrared silhouette,
lifeless torso bound in vines of doubt.
My voice unheard, torn in barren drought.
Moon ivy hides wilted beauty, I shout.
Blackberry pools engulf this silent threat.
My voice unheard, torn in barren drought.
For I'm just an infrared silhouette,
Moon ivy hides wilted beauty, I shout.
Blackberry pools engulf this silent threat,
fertile soil for seeds of weeds to sprout.
Moon ivy hides wilted beauty, I shout,
torn by acidic arrow's touch hitting its clout,
unseen center of martyr's rosette.
Moon ivy hides wilted beauty, I shout.
Blackberry pools engulf this silent threat.
Author notes
clout: a term for archery target
rosette: in botany, a rosette is a circular arrangement of the leaves, with all the leaves at a single height.
This is an "Intertwined Triolet". A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.
To intertwine the Triolet I simply took the 5th and 6th lines and used the same routine with them to create the second part, which is intertwined with the first.
A contest entry
- WHITE IVY ABANDONED TO INFRARED-Revised**INVITE ONLY by Blue Rew.
957 points, ended December 26, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dear poet, please do me the honor of removing your piece from this contest and re-entering it here:
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2382966
This write deserves much more than an HM but due
to the quality of several writes entered here;
I don't have enough shiny cups! My revised contest
will only award three more from this contest with
Gold, Silver, and bronze. I'm sorry for the extra
work, but wish to grace this write with more than green. Thank-you, Blue -
Title, form and visual emotion to stun...
this piece packs it all. Execution of this
form is a challenge and you have made it seem
effortless and elegant in language & feeling.
Blue -
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I am honored to receive such praise by yourself delightful Blue. As I said many times before. I am constantly giving my best for your benefit.
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Well... I am really not a fan of the repetitive rhyming ... but this was not so bad... had it not had that I would have enjoyed it MORE but there was nothing particularly wrong with this.
It had great imagery and lots of personality. Good luck in the contest.
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I'm once again at a loss for words...
You create such fantastic imagery..
This is really a wonderful entry...
Very well done...
"Moon ivy hides wilted beauty, I shout.
Blackberry pools engulf this silent threat,
fertile soil for seeds of weeds to sprout.
Moon ivy hides wilted beauty, I shout,
torn by acidic arrow's touch hitting its clout,
unseen center of martyr's rosette."
Breathtaking imagery...
Best wishes with this entry...
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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