All our unseen tears that have dried,
echoes of our screams,
clutched heart wishes,
true repentance gnawing soul,
like its sister guilt
with heavier heart,
questions raising like waves,
but crashed inside the body
without proper guide,
all hobnobbing like bubbles
whirling,
in the black hole.
In a list
A contest entry
- What's Within a Black Hole? by aslanlight.
600 points, ended December 30, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a deeply thought provoking entry. Yes cleverly done; a Black Hole is an excellent metaphor for the vast array of emotions we experience and their sometimes seemingly endless depth.
Peace Georgia
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that's interesting, the image of repentance as a sister to guilt. You don't mention atonement for wrongdoing.
Questions! Well, isn't that the truth?
This is a unusual and welldone take on that black hole prompt.
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According to Paul faith is not by works. When we're forgiven it's free!
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it is a truth...another cousin or sister of guilt can be atonement..But I was focusing on the dark side of it all to fill the black hole.
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i love the originaliy off this. It is magnetic.
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Thanks a lot ....
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I like this alot
I could not come up with anything for the black hole, I suppoe I needed to look outside the circle instead on in it, this is really a great write I love creations like the waves but crashed in the body with out proper guide awsome words! -
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Thanks a lot...I went way off science for this one....
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Grest take on "black hole"
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Thanks...just something that came to my mind instead of all the science involved.....
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don't know if I want to whirl in that black hole!!! excellent poem...beautiful take on the prompt~ best to you in the contest~ blessings always sissy~ Trisha
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Thanks SIS...many For now let us stick to our crumbs....black hole for later
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