A blemish of perfection etched across your face
With a blink of an eye
Images of you form voluntarily in my mind
Wish I could stop these delicate hands
From gliding and carving you into life
The doors have been opened to reveal only a soul enslaved by love
Cease the awakening of broken hearts, still mending
Cascade kisses flow gently in the wind
Lying here now, gazing at the depth of your eyes…
Seeing how they contain me inside,
as our souls weave and combine
completing the beating of our hearts.
The fierce aura of your spirit
Canvassed and suspended
I see, the passion shining through and the love I have for you.
Pigmented with equality,
We remain like shards of a puzzle
Creating a retentive memory of the mystery…
With this mastery,
Your visage
Reclined next to me.
Author notes
was thinking of painting a portrait... since I don't know how to draw... I wrote those thoughts instead... hope it makes sense.
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Comments
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A lovely poem full of sweet, endearing romantic imagery that goes a long way towards igniting an emotional response from readers. Well done poet.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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galing nito
at ang lalim din
i guess one not need a paintbrush, a pallete of paints, and a canvass
i love the flow
how the art materializes and being enchanted
as it form into beauty
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beautifully penned and it contains a nice flow
well done with this one
it was lovely
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This is a beautifully flowing poem,my favorite line is"Cease the awakening of broken hearts, still mending".I very much enjoyed reading it from the beginnig to the end I also loved your imagery it makes me want to feel all the emotions i feel in the poem.
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This is much better than any portrait you might have painted, since this is flawless.
The only thing I could suggest is hitting "enter" twice at the end, to put a space between the last line and the Author Notes, just to make it look cleaner and more professiona. I don't feel as if there are any flow issues, which is great. Wonderful write! -
beautiful...If I were to make a suggestion it would be break the long lines for a smoother flow, just my opinion....but regardles...beautiful and passionate, Great job!
Good luck in the contest!
Jamie
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It's truly beautiful. Thanks for entering.
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