Naked before their eyes, I yearn
for human embrace that will offer
threads of endless soothe
to fill my nothingness …
one touch
will offer comfort.
Pursued through their eyes, like
hunters silently stalking their prey
with spears of gluttonous greed
to disembowel my every weakness …
one sparkle of eye
will offer reprieve.
Haunted by their eyes, like
discarded trash I walk among them
forever trying to be invisible, as
they seem to retch at my sight …
one word
will offer hope.
My Lord, as you can see inside of me,
I am contented,
for you offer acceptance and love –
the same as for those around me.
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Author notes
Slight change: now used itlics, and changed the structure of the final stanza.
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- before your eyes... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended December 18, 2007, 8 entries
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525 points, ended December 31, 2007, 25 entries
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300 points, ended December 31, 2007, 3 entries
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(NOW I MUST RUN TO PREPARE FOR CHURCH!)
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Congratulations, Frans,
on this multi-trophied poem! FransB splendour at its best.
Love
Myra -
Beautifully penned!
Deserving of so many trophies!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Excellent
So very well done. Congratulations on your trophies they are so well deserved.
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How is it possible that I did not read this wondrous poem?
Ah Frans! A very worthy winner in every meaning of the word! I am totally awed by the depth in this write, and I merely echo all your readers.
Well done and blessed be, Friend!
Myra
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Thanks for entering this again Congrats on the Gold in my ap sis's contest
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wow this is an excellent write and is powerfully written with captivating words well done and best of luck
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Excellent write here Thank you for entering my contest I wish you the best of luck
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Nicely writ my friend, as I see this as an extended metaphor for the surprises we face in life, and must handle as they come, it also shows the inner turmoil of a soul seeking solace. beautiful imagery. I like this, as it is immersed in waters deep
Very nicely composed, and congrats on the two trophies.
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lol still love this poem, I think the first paragrapgh in stead of alike should possibly just e like, But I assumed it was a typ
thanks for your submission and please let me know if that is a typo, thank you
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Hehe this is awesome and I see you won gold in creations contest to. Good luck in that this gets published have to wait and see what she says. I like it though lol
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Wow, brilliantly written. The final stanza draws deeper meaning to the poem than I had expected throughout the reading. Thank you for sharing a piece of yourself.
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Lovely,
it takes one ona journey that is lonely, some por soul
seeking aceptence in this life. i find it heart warming and spiritual. Again, a brilliant piece of your caring mind.
Slán Dolores xx
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This is inspiring as well as spiritual. So very captivating.
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My Lord, as “you can see inside of me”,
I am contented, for you offer acceptance and love –
the same as for those around me…
Well said..this is a moving verse..I love this piece..thanks for this wonderful entry in my contest...
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I felt that God was speaking of Himself here. A most thoughtful write- very deep.
good luck
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