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l
o
v
e
luminous the rim, translucent the glass,
the grail, this body, holy reliquary
of wine - love's nectar dissolving
limbs the ecstatic lovers
melt as bodies meld
- body as chalice -
- soul as wine -
the
lover's
merest
sip
stirs
lover and
loved in unison sigh
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A contest entry
- When you make love ... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended December 28, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the comparison!
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Beautiful shape poem, and the text is perfectly fitted to both the shape and the contest. I love the line: "the grail, this body, holy reliquary"....excellent metaphor...congratulations on the bronze. Peace, Rhonda
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Many thanks Rhonda!
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stirs
lover and
loved in unison sigh
This is a curve of the love stated in the curved shape as well..I love this intriguing piece..thanks for the wonderful entry inb my contest.... -
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Many thanks PB.
TeresaUK [ex Aurore]
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