I dream in smoke, as winter storms so breathe
a din beneath the nightly winds, so cold
so stately oaks, to dance inside the dark,
and travel on the snow filled path of seethe.
For rage beguiles the wretched heart, so bold
chaste it, or lest it burn the veins to spark.
I walk in blizzards wrath, the snow cajoles
my soul, to muse over the falling snow.
So failing softly in my sight, console
this loss I feel, in the quiet that I know.
So chilled the bones, of this frozen parole
to lock me out of time, and break the crow.
I wait beneath the falling flakes, to stroll
and see the broken bird, a moss plateau...
Author notes
I simply wondered what a reversed sonnet would look like... Alas, this was a bit of fun, but not a sonnet,
simply based on the form in reverse...
In a list
A contest entry
- your best work composed over the last twelve months by Lute.
600 points, ended January 9, 2008, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know How this makes you feel, what do you think?
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This is a very interesting experiment that has worked rather well. Well done.
Good luck in your contest.
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It has an
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pattern
s s s s s s ss s s s
this loss I feel, in the quiet that I know. - (11)
s s s s s s s s s s
So chilled the bones, of this frozen parole - (10)
s s s s s s s s s s
to lock me out of time, and break the crow. - (10)
s s ss s s s s s s
I wait beneath the falling flakes, to stroll - (10)
s s s s s s s s s
and see the broken bird, a moss plateau... - (9)
content 8
vocabulary 10.5
accuracy 7.8
creativity 7
theme 7.5
originality 7
totals: 47.8
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O,K,
you must seek a prewrite contest to showcase this one Robert...
how in the world did you pull this off? LOL
it baffles me to read this...let alone...consider the proposition of composing such a brilliant poetic masterpiece...
your mind is truly a captivating wonder! LOL
very well done, sir!
Blessings! Tammy
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I loved this!
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You damn poet and your amazing poetry!! As usual you captivated me with your words. This had exquisite imagery and a magnificent message.
Beautiful job darling.
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