No need to forgive me
I remember your eyes be blue
and a summer's day
is far more temporate than you.
Your love is no red red rose,
perhaps a more common pink or yellow
Candle light is nice
but you're more a lamp fellow.
Your voice isn't liquid,
your eyes are no deep pools,
those who compare thee to princes
would be compared to fools.
But I love you even so,
just wanted you too know.
Author notes
Inspired by shakespeares sonnets, and somebody somewhere saying 'I don't get what is so great about shakespeare, he just strung a bunch of cliques together' brill! Whoever said that, brill!
A contest entry
- Anything goes really by Blood13Rayne.
390 points, ended December 26, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I think you mean cliche? Yeah, Shakespeare rules. it is he who created cliches. He said them first!
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i personally love shakespeare.
and the fact that he inspired this piece brings a smile to my otherwise frowning face.
amazing write -
AMAZING!
This was my favorite poem by u. it was amazing. i liked the rhyming (really good)I think wat i really like is the simplicity, good job! loved it!
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