like fresh tracks in snow
you left your trail of this tryst;
this blueprint of my rejection of you
they lead on, around, under,
but then disappear
as if they froze off
and you were left gasping
like something left too long
in the sea
and found itself beached
in icy foam of some foreign shore
I am not interested in how drifted you feel
I am busy keeping myself warm
in this igloo I have come to love
more than cave-dwelling with you
I keep my own skin warm.
your quick visits do little
to melt this comfortable cold
I have, so, become accustomed to
Author notes
photograph by Rolf Hicker
In a list
A contest entry
- Your Metaphor Prompt is Winter ~ Give me some Free Verse by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended December 19, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this was awsome congrats on the gold
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ty so much.
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This is excellently penned. Very strong and rolls you right into it as you read it, especially aloud. Wondeful job here :D
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yes, Imeant it to be read... I do do readings ocassionally and this is one that needs that. ty so much for the gold.
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Excellent write.Should it be as if on the sixth line.I'm not that clued up on free verse but this is well done and an intetesting topic, Ros
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you saved my poem with my silly error...ty so very much for letting me know..I can so easily miss things.
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This softness of this poem is nice, the flow is also nice as well. I can see events unfolding in my head while I read your poem.
Nice job!
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ty nicholette..I was concerned about the capitalization but wanted it soft, so it seems it worked.
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Looks pretty cozy to me too! Rejection is sometimes inevitable, and always unwelcome? Maybe "he" should have been... kinder??? Best of luck!
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I deal with letting things go (thing/person/place....) and sometimes we have tostay in a cold place for a bit...
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Beautiful...
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ty.
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