twisted hearts take shattering blows,
the pain never stops, it only slows...
love lost, love gained
my world is bright after it has rained.
it is said that if you get fooled twice, then
shame on you, but what if its not what you do?
whats if its life
back to play its rotten tricks...
life gathers in this moment
this moment of truth
can you tell me the truth?
can you tell me im wrong?
A contest entry
- PRE-WRITES GALLORE ~!~!~! by Naridill.
800 points, ended January 31, 2008, 138 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want a lot of poems... by love my jose luis.
900 points, ended February 21, 2008, 125 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what is your opinion of this?
Comments
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I like this... Especially the last 2 lines... They definately stand out in my mind, I really like that when I'm reading a lot of poems, I like to read something that really stands out in my mind. Great poem and good luck in my contest.
~Maria -
The last line is a stunner - very intense and worded with passion. Love the intense feeling with this piece.
Thanks for entering,
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sweet write like the rest i have read a beautiful poem indeed im sorry i have not much to say to theres none the less your a great poet with allot of fellin
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cool nice poem I like your last line can you tell me im wrong
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