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Southern Grace

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I ride the south mountains

wolf dog, Red wind and me

call of my Great Grandmothers

Catawba and Cherokee.

 

House closing in pushing me forward

the horse barn smells sweet as perfume

Country girl through and through

sweet southern drawl like molasses

strap on my boot knife

three eighty colt goes with me.

 

Steal away in the night

like a princess safe in her kingdom

six miles up the side  by the rocky stream

we make our camp our peace

 

Comb out my hair let it fall

fire light rushing water

lay back saddle for my pillow thinking

so hot.. remembering last summer

I had taken my shirt off to blind fold a two year old

and pictures had ended up in every barn around here

A sports bra you would have thought I was naked

 

 

I want the water so bad it always wins.

tugging off my boots standing up to strip for the trees,

laughing just a little at myself, missing the warm strong hands of my man

wiggling slowly out of tight riding jeans,

touching my breasts nipples tight and aching fighting back desire,

laughter and tears  have me wondering .

 

 

Lying on the rocks cold water enveloping me,

restless nothing is right tears fall mingle with water.

missing  part of me the man of times past.

Wolf has one mate for life she runs with him ..

my body betrays me.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Brazos silver member
    June 11
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    The first part read like a dream, the second was very sensual, further down becoming wanton, and...ending in mystery. The betrayal of your body could be wanton, or it could be sad...I prefer the wanton.

    Very nicely done, your imagery is beautiful, your knowledge apparent.

    Brazos


  • parenchma
    June 9
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    hang in there.

  • Ibrah
    February 28

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    Excellent

    Mind seeks to escape and seek refuge in a world of dreams but as i see it, you really burn the wood.
    Cheers!!!!


  • Florida Sunshine gold member
    February 24
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    This has an interesting story line ~ It really has a nice start ~ I'm a little confused ~ on if she drowned ~ or lived in membrence ~ the imagery is very well done ~ you can carry any reader to a far off land ~

    Thanks so much for entering the "Set the bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ Best of luck to you ~

  • Sagerider
    January 26
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    I really love this one.

    Poems like this get a teaser kicking his stall and letting out some really brassy neighs.


  • islekine
    January 19
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    So beautifully done...

    As usual!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • sunchaser silver member
    January 14
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    Beautiful...a lovely story with stong feelings and emotion...


  • arafura
    January 10

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    wow...

    Oh I'm glad you told me to read this one! It is so smoothly sensual and so well written! You drew me right into the picture with your great imagery... this is my fav of your's so far! Bravo!

  • davidwright silver member
    January 10

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    A nice excursion to a place of sanctuary. Very descriptive write and good closing line. Happy trails
  • TranquilSea
    January 9
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    Well done. You are skilled at passionate expression. Good job cupcake!

  • Lute
    January 9

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    content-7.4
    vocabulary-10.2
    accuracy-7.6
    creativity-7.4
    theme-7.3
    originality-7.4

    totals-47.3
  • Wilson Maxwell
    January 4
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    Amazing piece you have flowing here. You bring out the imagery with awareness of the country girl.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    Excellent write here

    Very nice work here and yes the smells the life of a country girl I so miss those days

  • Nighttime angel
    December 27, 2007

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    Rheea, this is a beautiful poem. this is filled with wonderful imagery. excellent job on writing this. you do have a great talent. I love the 2nd to last line in the last stanza.

    kat


  • moluv10
    December 26, 2007

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    This is very good. I'm from the south so i can relate to some of this great piece. great imagery. I really like this.


  • Cherubic
    December 25, 2007

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    a beautifully written piece! I love the subject as well as how you convey such powerfull emotions. good write

  • Random Goldfish gold member
    December 25, 2007

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    This was done beautifully. The poetry has such personality and devolpes perfectly. You have the wonderful ability to create an image that remains.

    Best Wishes,
    ~Mairèad~


  • Peteskid gold member
    December 24, 2007

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    wonderful, expressive and reflective, and simply beautiful...solitude is like a dark cloud across the face of the Sun, it passes easily unto brighter day...PK


  • jacbgd2 gold member
    December 23, 2007
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    WHO!!!!!!  This is dynamic!!!!!! I love the true realness of this piece!!!!! To think so vividly is a gift and this piece really shows off your gift!!!!! I loved this read!!!!! I could almost feel the things expressed in these wonderful words!!!! You are a fantastic writer!!!!!! Thank you for sharing!!!!!!


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    December 22, 2007

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    Raw and honest!

    Very insightful poem you have scribed here. I loved how down-to-earth it is. The descriptions and imagery are wonderful;



    "Lying on the rocks cold water enveloping me,

    restless nothing is right tears fall mingle with water.

    missing part of me the man of times past.

    Wolf has one mate for life she runs with him ..

    my body betrays me."

    Tormenting and hauntingly vivid in the reality it portrays and the sadness and pulling of one's heart and soul with yearnings, needs and guilt.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    December 22, 2007

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    wonderful imagery in every line of this piece. A beautiful story brought to life with delicate words. Very well done.
    Rory


  • Playjazz66 silver member
    December 17, 2007
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    Now your mind is roaming free, riding the winds. A beautiful journey it is!
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