Daisys Wilt
Webs Are Worn
Dust takes over
we all mourn.
Torn on the inside, but still we fight
destiny's unkown,
wading through the dark
looking for the light.
Hated heart
complex mind
mean soul
we're all unkind.
Drowning in our hopes,
asphixiated by our life and peers
judgmental we are,
trembling in fear.
You, telling me i'm ugly.
You, telling me i'm hated.
you with your cruel eyes
this world war 3
between whispers and lies.
A contest entry
- no title by lee-sharp.
1500 points, ended January 15, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want emotion! by TwiztidMaggot.
600 points, ended December 20, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What'cha think?
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very emotional which touchs the soul
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dark, vile, and honesty. i think i love it!!!
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there will always be a war between truth and lies but ultimately truth will win out in this battle!
Interesting perspective!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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You have a really poetic way of putting things! I hope you don't really think every one is hateful!There are a few good people left in this world!
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Simply remarkable indeed. A very powerful and apt depiction of the state this world and its ever-so volitile "dominant" species has found it self tangled within. Guten arbeit mein leiblings. (good work my love) .
Love you,
-Falecurst
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This is pretty good. I like how you wrote it. Nice owrk. Keep it up! best of luck in both contests.
crimson -
oh and line 1 should either be daisy's or daisies
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it kind of stumbles over itself. thats the best way i can put it.
but it did strike me in an odd way. every line sounded like a title.
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