Swallowed
deep within dark grounds.
Pain and suffering
feathers, left deafly profound...
Diminishing, footsteps
to Hell……
Author notes
prompt: where are you?
A contest entry
- Where are you? by Naridill.
300 points, ended December 18, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I feel the emotion grasped within this, very strong and beautiful. A well crafted ending but I feel some could be alot more firm.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck.
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Hell exists only in our mind my love, When we cast it out we have nothing left but Heaven and God. It is then that we can truly live God's will in our lives. I love you...Scott
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Just sounds like Texas to me...
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feathers? what sort of flying critter was this? Hope you do not wind up in hell, it refuses to ereleaase its prisoners. success in the contest.
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wow very deep, good luck
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Hmm....
I see we can hang out thier! i hear its great in the winter.... -
Such grand imagery. And hell is sure fits. Great post.
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Such wonderful imagery ... many
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Your too is very good.
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I'm not sure how to comment on this poem in its potent existence...You took this prompt and did something with it that has me thinking, even now, as great poets do...I must continue to absorb these words in amazement...Good luck ...
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