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Act One - End of Scene










I rummaged
           through an old box
of winter boots, shoes
           and vintage clothing
wondering
which ones fit
                   the era

Ran my index finger
       along a playbill
             tossed beneath
       an old armchair
and smiled at having
the opening monologue
that set an even tone

                           and pace

Stood
in the back
of the house
imagined myself
on the proscenium
where flashbacks
laughed in a peculiar
southern drawl

Wooed misters

           as ingénue
and tore              running across 

set designs' backyard 
a tomboy character
knickers tailor-made

prancing before my eyes
                  in pied-piper
succession

were
grandmother's eyeglasses
          calling me to follow
her calm, sincere voice

These dazed
but brightly collective
                memories
of accents

              and stutters
long pauses
and

     romantic lines
bewitched my senses

As ghost light
f l i c k e r e d
                  to give sign
of coming blackout
        curtains close
in fade to black of life
                   and love

Suddenly
a voice

pitched
        from the rafters
in bass resonance
          spilled over
and said


"performance well done"













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  • rendezvous
    December 26, 2007

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    Mmmm! This is so wonderfully romantic - allowing nostalgia without bitterness. Thank you for putting me back up on the stage again (oh, that glorious spotlight!) and congrats on the gold. Well deserved.

    jen


  • Nicolette gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    This is indeed your heart, Renee... on stage - how well you perform life, love and poetry!!

    Wishing you a wonderful Christmas and losts of beauty on all the stages of your life!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • madamcb
    December 15, 2007

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    So beautiful

    This is so hauntingly lovely. The visual was vivid, the memories lingered as if I were there. i could see the ghost light, just slightly left or right of center stage as if not wanting the spotlight.The double or triple or quadruple meanings behind this write is genius. Many different life scenes come to mind as well as the theatrical scene. thanx for the memories, conni

  • mcheadle
    December 15, 2007
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    Well dosen't that make you feel good

    Well done again I say!...mac

  • tara wilson gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    well done...this poem stands on its own, has brilliant and consistent metaphor, and has that clear 'aha moment' at the end that I was looking for, that I had experienced in the example poem, although yours is all its own...and I like the new background..thank you..


    • poetryality silver member
      December 15, 2007
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      Thank you lovely lady. The Theatre (performing) is truly my heart. It has been for over 20 years and now I am making it the heart of my grandson. He is a triple threat. He can sing, mime, and act. LOL My heart swells. Great contest, and thank you for placing this entry in your finalist's list. I agree that this background is far better than the violet curtains. LOL Have fun judging!


      Much Love ♥

      Renee

      • tara wilson gold member
        December 15, 2007
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        well, the curtains were so fitting for the poem...but they sort of 'covered' it...now your poem is in center stage!! lol




  • Mel-the-Believer
    December 15, 2007

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    Wow! This is really great. I absolutely loved this, I really did. Wonderfully written. Good luck in the contest here. God Bless!

  • tara wilson gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    oh, but ...please change the background though, I am going cross eyed!! LOL


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 15, 2007

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    Ooh my! What an EXCELLENT piece this is!
    Awesomely written, hon!
    Wishing you the best of luck in the contest!

  • tara wilson gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    ahhhh...I do believe it is the applause..excellent...very well done... I'll add it to the finals for some more reads, I think there's a typo - from the rafters not form...thanks for entering my contest, I am very happy to find this creative and well thought out piece here!

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